Join The Community

Connect, showcase, get feedback and grow as a songwriter. Join the Frettie community today!

Between A Rock And A Hard Place

MavisEllen Jackson

October 06, 2017

Genre: Pop

More by MavisEllen


Likes

Our Sponsors

Learn the art, craft & business of songwriting from hit songwriter, Brent Baxter!

Likes:

Views: 134

Responses: 1




Share

Report

About This Song


'Between A Rock And A Hard Place' I wrote a few years ago when I was rescued from a very difficult time when I was rather unhappy following my retirement from 18 years of nursing. Now that it has been brilliantly composed, played and recorded by Tilly Aldaine I would like to dedicate it to my rescuer Rob Bray. Of course I realise now that what I had perceived as an ending was indeed a new beginning and my songwriting is as important a part of my life as nursing. It and the wonderful people I have met because of it have saved me time and time again.


1 Response


Brent Baxter

Thanks for sharing this!  I dig the groove.  I like that it has groove and is positive.  One thing I noticed: in the chorus you rhyme “place” and “space.”  Then you do it again in the 1st verse.  Try to keep your rhymes different throughout the song.  You especially don’t want to use the same rhymes in the verses that you use in the chorus- it steals power and interest from the chorus.

Hope that helps.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

October 19, 2017

No members have liked this comment.


You must be signed in to post feedback.


0

Brent Baxter

Thanks for sharing this!  I dig the groove.  I like that it has groove and is positive.  One thing I noticed: in the chorus you rhyme “place” and “space.”  Then you do it again in the 1st verse.  Try to keep your rhymes different throughout the song.  You especially don’t want to use the same rhymes in the verses that you use in the chorus- it steals power and interest from the chorus.

Hope that helps.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

October 19, 2017


Between A Rock And A...

Written by MavisEllen Jackson

I was between a rock and a hard place
Between the devil and the deep blue sea,
You entered in, into my space
And you unlocked the prison that was me.

I was in such a dark place
Then you came along,
You helped me find my own space
And my world became a song.
I’ve been in a desert arid and dry
But my voice has never left me alone
And I’ve still had to have a try
Picked at words like a dog with a bone.

My voice has a message
There are songs I must sing,
My glass is filling up
I don’t know when to say when,
My voice has a message
My thoughts are on the wing,
Brimming over is my cup
For my voice is my pen....

I was between a rock and a hard place
Between the devil and the deep blue sea,
You entered in, into my space
And you unlocked the prison that was me.

I do know that clichés might be frowned on
But when you’re trapped inside a hole
At a time when you’ve been downed on
To climb back out again’s the only goal.

My voice has a message
There are songs I must sing,
My glass is filling up
I don’t know when to say when,
My voice has a message
My thoughts are on the wing,
Brimming over is my cup
For my voice is my pen...

I was between a rock and a hard place
Between the devil and the deep blue sea,
You entered in, into my space
And you unlocked the prison, you unlocked the prison that was

Between a rock and a hard place
Between the devil and the deep blue sea, yes I was,
You entered in, into my space
And you unlocked the prison, the prison that was me
Ah the prison that was me.



×