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Hairspray

Janet Foley

October 05, 2017

Genre: Country

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An upbeat song about the importance of hairspray in the summertime. The track hasn't been mixed yet and I'm still debating about having the dialogue in the intro but I wanted to upload it to get some feedback in terms of lyrics and melody.

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Lyrics and Melody. Also, based on this, does the song have the potential to become a song I could pitch to publishers?


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Brent Baxter

Hey, Janet!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I dig the title and the general idea.  However, I’m missing the rhymes in the verses.  It feels like it should be an A-A-B / C-C-B scheme in the verses.  In other words the 1st two lines would both have the “when” rhyme.  Then the 3rd line (“Hell”) would rhyme with the 6th line (“o’clock”).  And the 4th and 5th line would both rhyme with “bunches.”

I’m not crazy about how she’s telling the guy he’d better fix his hair with hairspray if he’s expecting to “win.”  Seems too shallow.  Plus, most country boys probably aren’t the type to wear hairspray.

And I think the chorus melody needs to rise up more.  That’ll give it more energy and punch.

But I like that you’re having fun with that title and putting some love story in there.  Just my $0.02.  Hope it helps!

October 14, 2017

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Janet Foley

Hey Brent, thank you for your feedback, it’s very much appreciated!

I’m with you on the second verse, I originally had the roles reversed with him telling her that she needed to ‘fix her hair’ but I think I must’ve had a Shania Twain moment and thought it would be funny to switch it. It doesn’t really fit into the chorus though haha, so I’ll change it back.

I’ll make adjustments with the other things as well and repost at a later date. This is my first song so it’s good to see where I’m going wrong! 

October 15, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Janet!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I dig the title and the general idea.  However, I’m missing the rhymes in the verses.  It feels like it should be an A-A-B / C-C-B scheme in the verses.  In other words the 1st two lines would both have the “when” rhyme.  Then the 3rd line (“Hell”) would rhyme with the 6th line (“o’clock”).  And the 4th and 5th line would both rhyme with “bunches.”

I’m not crazy about how she’s telling the guy he’d better fix his hair with hairspray if he’s expecting to “win.”  Seems too shallow.  Plus, most country boys probably aren’t the type to wear hairspray.

And I think the chorus melody needs to rise up more.  That’ll give it more energy and punch.

But I like that you’re having fun with that title and putting some love story in there.  Just my $0.02.  Hope it helps!

October 14, 2017

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Janet Foley

Hey Brent, thank you for your feedback, it’s very much appreciated!

I’m with you on the second verse, I originally had the roles reversed with him telling her that she needed to ‘fix her hair’ but I think I must’ve had a Shania Twain moment and thought it would be funny to switch it. It doesn’t really fit into the chorus though haha, so I’ll change it back.

I’ll make adjustments with the other things as well and repost at a later date. This is my first song so it’s good to see where I’m going wrong! 

October 15, 2017


I've been living in this town since I don't know when
When the cut-off jeans come out y'know it's
Hot as hell
Mamas on the porch pulling hair into bunches
Daughters crying out 'cos they're late for their practise
At 6 o'clock
But Mama says...

If you're fixin' to win you'd better fix your hair
'Cos it matters much more than the clothes you wear
If you can't stand the heat, you'd better pray for rain
Or make sure you're wearing, some good hairspray

Everybody in towns gonna be at the circus
Kids running round cotton candy and face paints
Everywhere
Bluegrass band playing songs til the morning
Two-step dancing, boots kicking the dirt up
He takes my hand
But then I say...

If you're fixin' to win you'd better fix your hair
'Cos it matters much more than the clothes you wear
If you can't stand the heat, you'd better pray for rain
Or make sure you're wearing, some good hairspray

I thank the Lord the AC's on
When I'm sat in church on Sunday morning
Doors open wide
Crickets are all joining in on the sermon
Ladies lining up two by two in the bathroom
Comb in hand
And they all say...

If you're fixin' to win you'd better fix your hair
'Cos it matters much more than the clothes you wear
If you can't stand the heat, you'd better pray for rain
Or make sure you're wearing, some good hairspray

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