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Faded Beauty

Michael R. J. Roth

August 16, 2017

Genre: Folk

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I saw her in the window seat on the plane from Wichita, gazing out on golden fields. I know that isn’t what she saw.


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Graham Donahue

I like the song. As is often the case with me and folk songs I have some trouble understanding what the idea of the song is, but like I said, that is probably just me. I do like the imagery and refreshing rhymes. Very nice.

August 17, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Thanks for your kind feedback, Graham. I have been accused of being overly poetic before! It’s a metaphor of America. Brent has cautioned about the danger of “knowing too much” about what your song means. It wasn’t intentionally obscure. I just thought it was obvious. That’s why feedback is a good thing. Incidentally, it was a First Place Lyric Winner in the Unisong International Song Contest. So some people do get it. I often rewrite songs, but I like this one the way it is.

August 17, 2017

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Graham Donahue

That makes more sense now. Don’t take my feedback the wrong way. Like I said, I am not always good at interpreting this style of music so it is probably just me.

That is cool that it one a contest!

August 19, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Graham, there’s no such thing as bad feedback.  I really appreciate your comments. Contests are a crap shoot, and I just got lucky on that one.

September 12, 2017

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Graham Donahue

I like the song. As is often the case with me and folk songs I have some trouble understanding what the idea of the song is, but like I said, that is probably just me. I do like the imagery and refreshing rhymes. Very nice.

August 17, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Thanks for your kind feedback, Graham. I have been accused of being overly poetic before! It’s a metaphor of America. Brent has cautioned about the danger of “knowing too much” about what your song means. It wasn’t intentionally obscure. I just thought it was obvious. That’s why feedback is a good thing. Incidentally, it was a First Place Lyric Winner in the Unisong International Song Contest. So some people do get it. I often rewrite songs, but I like this one the way it is.

August 17, 2017

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Graham Donahue

That makes more sense now. Don’t take my feedback the wrong way. Like I said, I am not always good at interpreting this style of music so it is probably just me.

That is cool that it one a contest!

August 19, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Graham, there’s no such thing as bad feedback.  I really appreciate your comments. Contests are a crap shoot, and I just got lucky on that one.

September 12, 2017


I saw her in the window seat
On the plane from Wichita,
Gazing out on golden fields.
I know that isn’t what she saw.
I know that isn’t what she saw.

She sat there in her faded beauty,
Skin soft as a sandy dune,
Silver glimmer on her lips,
As if she had kissed the moon,
As if she had kissed the moon.

Chorus:
Oh, Faded beauty,
The clouds are marching through the skies
They look like wedding dresses
On young brides
Above the tattered flag
Of countryside.

She was wearing diamond earrings,
A leather coat with ermine trim,
Mementos of a love she lost.
It’s all that she has left of him,
All that she has left of him.

It was on election day,
The halls were filled with groans and sighs
And choices made and thrown away
Between the promises and lies,
Between the promises and lies.

(Chorus)

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