Song about a gal that is tired of her X, and how he keeps trying to get her back. She's moved on, he hasn't. I co-wrote this with Kathy Keogh
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Don't Come Cryin To Me
Michael Casali BMI
Kathy Keogh BMI
email mrc708@comcast.net
So you come around here and darken my doorway guess it didn't go your way
And you tell me that you're fellin so all alone, well I guess I she some tears of my own
what's it all mean to me, you take me for a fool but you're mistaken
Don't come cryin to me, now that it's you're heart that is breakin
Don't come crin to me, now that it's your hand that are shakin
Cause it wasn't that long ago, when it was my heart that you broke
And now that she's set you free just let it be, and don't come cryin to me
Should I curse your name or stop and thank heaven, slam the door or let you in
You're diggin you're heart face down in a ditch, don't you know karma's a bitch
What's it all mean to me, If you think I care then you're mistaken
Don't come cryin to me, now that it's you're heart that is breakin
Don't come crin to me, now that it's your hand that are shakin
Cause it wasn't that long ago, when it was my heart that you broke
And now that she's set you free just let it be, and don't come cryin to me
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Michael, I like the theme and the upbeat tempo, but honestly, it kind of took me out of the song when the guy started chanting. Since you didn’t post all the lyrics and I have to go by what I heard in the chant, it made me feel like it was a completely different song.
I think you have a few too many “and’s” and “that’s” in the lyrics. I know they’re there for melody timing, but think those lines can be written better.
In V1, the “well” also needs to go. Speaking of which, you “guess” you shed some tears? To me, you either shed tears or you didn’t, no guessing about it.
A suggestion… what if you ended each verse with “don’t come cryin’ to me”, a few more beats of music, a break, then go into the chorus? Just a thought.
Keep writing,
Phillip
August 06, 2017
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Phillip Lemmonds
Michael, I like the theme and the upbeat tempo, but honestly, it kind of took me out of the song when the guy started chanting. Since you didn’t post all the lyrics and I have to go by what I heard in the chant, it made me feel like it was a completely different song.
I think you have a few too many “and’s” and “that’s” in the lyrics. I know they’re there for melody timing, but think those lines can be written better.
In V1, the “well” also needs to go. Speaking of which, you “guess” you shed some tears? To me, you either shed tears or you didn’t, no guessing about it.
A suggestion… what if you ended each verse with “don’t come cryin’ to me”, a few more beats of music, a break, then go into the chorus? Just a thought.
Keep writing,
Phillip
August 06, 2017
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