A song about living with bipolar disorder
Thanks for this Brent. Having suffered with bipolar myself for many years, this one was written from the heart and actually does express it from a personal viewpoint. So many singers and writers in this industry suffer fro depressive illnesses, some have even ended up taking their own lives, and i feel that this is a story well overdue to be told in song.
Ross
July 28, 2017
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Two Poles Apart ( © R Hemsworth 16-06-2017)
YOU CAN’T IMAGINE WHAT IT’S LIKE TO BE
LIVING INTWO KINDS OF REALITY
ONE DAY YOUR WORLD’S A MILE HIGH
YOU BELIEVE THAT YOU CAN ALMOST FLY
BUT THEN SOMEBODY KNOCKS YOU RIGHT BACK DOWN
TO THE DARKNESS OF THE UNDERGROUND
EVIL WORDS CUT THROUGH YOU LIKE A KNIFE
YOU WANT TO RUN AWAY AND END YOUR LIFE
(Chorus)
IT’S SO HARD TO EXPLAIN
YOU'RE DROWNING IN A SEA OF PAIN
BUT THEN SUDDENLY THE SKY IS BLUE
AND THERE’S NOTHING THAT YOU CAN’T DO….
THIS IS HOW WE LIVE, WHEN WE’RE TWO POLES APART
ON A GOOD DAY YOU CAN REACH THE STARS
YOU DREAM OF MANSIONS AND EXPENSIVE CARS
YOU CAN REALLY DO THE WORK OF TEN
TAKE A REST AND DO IT ALL AGAIN
BUT WHEN THE BLACK DOG MEETS YOU AT THE GATE
YOU FALL AT SUCH AN ALARMING RATE
THE MEDICINE DON’T WORK NO MORE
AND YOU’RE KNOCKING AT THE DEVIL’S DOOR
(Chorus)
IT’S SO HARD TO EXPLAIN
WHY YOU’RE DROWNING IN A SEA OF PAIN
BUT SUDDENLY THE SKY SEEMS BLUE
AND THERE’S NOTHING THAT YOU CANNOT DO….
BECAUSE, THIS IS HOW WE LIVE, WHEN WE’RE TWO POLES APART
Middle 8
LIVING IN TWO DIFFERENT WORLDS, THAT PEOPLE CAN’T SEE
IT’S LIKE LIVING WITH TWO DIFFERENT FORMS OF ME
(Chorus)
IT’S SO HARD TO EXPLAIN
ALL THE ANGUISH AND THE AWFUL PAIN
BUT THEN SUDDENLY THE SKY IS BLUE
AND THERE’S NOTHING THAT YOU CAN’T DO….
THIS IS HOW WE LIVE, WHEN WE’RE TWO POLES APART
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Hey, Ross- thanks for sharing your song. Wow- that’s a tough subject matter. Not having personal experience with the topic, I’ll have a (limited) outsider’s perspective. But here goes…
I think the main thing for me is I want more showing than telling. I think I’d rather hear about a particular person with bipolar disorder than hearing about the disorder. Make the person real and empathetic. Show how it affects that particular person, and it’ll tug on the heartstrings more. Plus, it’ll probably open up who can sing it. Right now, the singer is taking on the status of expert. However, if they just tell Annie’s or Bill’s story, it’s less “hey, I’m an expert telling your about bipolar disorder” and more “hey, let me tell you about my friend, Annie.”
I think if you do that and really paint what it’s like (show me, don’t tell me), it’ll make your song a lot more powerful.
I applaud you for tackling this subject.
Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
July 27, 2017
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Thanks for this Brent. Having suffered with bipolar myself for many years, this one was written from the heart and actually does express it from a personal viewpoint. So many singers and writers in this industry suffer fro depressive illnesses, some have even ended up taking their own lives, and i feel that this is a story well overdue to be told in song.
Ross
July 28, 2017
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Hey, Ross- thanks for sharing your song. Wow- that’s a tough subject matter. Not having personal experience with the topic, I’ll have a (limited) outsider’s perspective. But here goes…
I think the main thing for me is I want more showing than telling. I think I’d rather hear about a particular person with bipolar disorder than hearing about the disorder. Make the person real and empathetic. Show how it affects that particular person, and it’ll tug on the heartstrings more. Plus, it’ll probably open up who can sing it. Right now, the singer is taking on the status of expert. However, if they just tell Annie’s or Bill’s story, it’s less “hey, I’m an expert telling your about bipolar disorder” and more “hey, let me tell you about my friend, Annie.”
I think if you do that and really paint what it’s like (show me, don’t tell me), it’ll make your song a lot more powerful.
I applaud you for tackling this subject.
Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
July 27, 2017
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