Brent Baxter

Hey, Amber!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I like the idea of the song.  I’d think about switching the 1st and 2nd verses.  Putting the “face turns red” “hot mess” stuff first will make your chorus hit harder ‘cuz you’ve set up why you didn’t know you were kissable, likable, etc.

I like that you’re writing uptempo positive!

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Amber Lewis

Brent,

Thank you for the feedback, I really like the idea to put those verses first! Thank You!

Phillip Lemmonds

I know you wrote this to be a country song, but every time I read the lyrics, I keep hearing a pop song.

Imagine a 120bpm track with synths and a good percussion beat:

I didn’t know, I could be kissable
I didn’t know, I was irresistible
I didn’t know, until you came along

Just a thought…
Phillip

Amber Lewis

Phillip,

I am a fan of almost all genres. I would love to make it pop or country. Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment! speeding things up is never a bad thing too:)!

T B

Great tune. Strong pop sensibility on the chorus.
This idea of I didn’t know I could be “likeable/kissable” is a great idea for a song. Specifically the last part of that question, and maybe even more specifically the kissable part. I bet so many people could relate to that realization falling in love for the first time. That said, I think there is a lot going on in the chorus, a couple different emotions, revolving around things you didn’t know about yourself, and regardless of what I found interesting, or the phrase I liked, you should ask yourself what is the one idea or word that hits you about this chorus (that comes after the I didn’t know question posed) and really make that the focal point, and if possible be able to repeat it in the chorus, especially at the end. If you went with kissable then Brent’s advice here is super solid as it sets up the chorus great as he noted, and then instead of the outdoors part you could use the lyrics from the last half of the first verse (now that you used face turns red hot mess instead) for a second verse (with some small tweaks so they fit of course.) And given you have a bridge and strong chorus, you may not even need the second verse to be as long as the first. You could have it all pretty close to finish with just some swapping of lyrics. Anyhow, a lot of ideas to consider, hopefully one of them was helpful!