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It Won’t Stop

Donna King

July 14, 2017

Genre: Country

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My husband and I know the story of addiction from the family side... We have family members who struggle and have lost two people dear to us because of it. This song was written as a part of that journey...

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Phillip Lemmonds

Welcome to Frettie!

On first listen, I’m not sure if the title should be “It Won’t Stop” or “‘Til You Let it Go”.  It sounds very good, but would love to see the lyric sheet. You can add the lyrics by logging in, going to the song, then edit details, then copy and paste.

Good job!
Phillip

July 14, 2017

Brent Baxter

Hey, Donna!  Welcome to Frettie!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I agree with Phillip about adding your lyrics- it’ll help folks give helpful feedback.  For myself, the lyrics didn’t reach out and grab me as much as I wanted them to.  I think some strong imagery would help anchor it in my mind.  The melody and feel was nice and easy, and overall, it would be easy to just surface-listen.  But with this topic, it deserves more than a surface listen. I need something to grab my attention and keep it.

That’s not to make light of the story of the song or its real-life inspiration.  Those are heavy, heartbreaking things.  As someone who (by the grace of God) doesn’t know that situation personally, I’m not feeling the hurt as much as I think I should.  If that makes sense.

I also agree with Phillip’s title suggestion “Till you let it go” is what I’d call it.

I hope it’s been helpful.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

July 14, 2017

Donna King

Love the input guys…Lyrics are posted.

We were torn on the title so this is very helpful. We were afraid “Til You Let It Go” sounds too expected…but so glad to learn that’s the title you’d go with.

I love the detail comment too… and I am always open to making changes and then some more changes on a song.

My reasoning in keeping this story somewhat open is so that, no matter what the situation a person is battling through with an addict (and there is never a shortage of details), this lyric will be relatable to hopefully everyone… We have been going into rehabs and family recovery situations, telling the family side of the story (along with sharing songs), so that was in our minds in the writing process.

With that, I am going to go back and see what I can do to make it more detailed and/or felt.

Thank you!

July 15, 2017

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Marvin Adcock

Donna,

I agree 100% with everything that Brent suggested, and I could hear in my head some descriptive lyrics that could make the song strong. I also believe the title should be “Till You Let It Go”. Cool song Donna!

Marvin

July 20, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

Welcome to Frettie!

On first listen, I’m not sure if the title should be “It Won’t Stop” or “‘Til You Let it Go”.  It sounds very good, but would love to see the lyric sheet. You can add the lyrics by logging in, going to the song, then edit details, then copy and paste.

Good job!
Phillip

July 14, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Donna!  Welcome to Frettie!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I agree with Phillip about adding your lyrics- it’ll help folks give helpful feedback.  For myself, the lyrics didn’t reach out and grab me as much as I wanted them to.  I think some strong imagery would help anchor it in my mind.  The melody and feel was nice and easy, and overall, it would be easy to just surface-listen.  But with this topic, it deserves more than a surface listen. I need something to grab my attention and keep it.

That’s not to make light of the story of the song or its real-life inspiration.  Those are heavy, heartbreaking things.  As someone who (by the grace of God) doesn’t know that situation personally, I’m not feeling the hurt as much as I think I should.  If that makes sense.

I also agree with Phillip’s title suggestion “Till you let it go” is what I’d call it.

I hope it’s been helpful.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

July 14, 2017

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Donna King

Love the input guys…Lyrics are posted.

We were torn on the title so this is very helpful. We were afraid “Til You Let It Go” sounds too expected…but so glad to learn that’s the title you’d go with.

I love the detail comment too… and I am always open to making changes and then some more changes on a song.

My reasoning in keeping this story somewhat open is so that, no matter what the situation a person is battling through with an addict (and there is never a shortage of details), this lyric will be relatable to hopefully everyone… We have been going into rehabs and family recovery situations, telling the family side of the story (along with sharing songs), so that was in our minds in the writing process.

With that, I am going to go back and see what I can do to make it more detailed and/or felt.

Thank you!

July 15, 2017

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Marvin Adcock

Donna,

I agree 100% with everything that Brent suggested, and I could hear in my head some descriptive lyrics that could make the song strong. I also believe the title should be “Till You Let It Go”. Cool song Donna!

Marvin

July 20, 2017


It Won’t Stop

Written by Donna King

It Won’t Stop (Til' You Let It Go)
Kris Bergsnes
Jake Ward
Donna King

You hear that Whiskey calling out his name
You know how bad he wants to take that drink
And it’s haunting you like a ghost
It won’t stop til you let it go…

You got some bruises that you can’t hide
You’re tryin’ to tell yourself you’re still alive
But In your heart you already know
It won’t stop til you let it go…

All the Demons, they’re not leaving, they’re just staying, they’re just playin
Around with broken soul
All the lyin, all the cryin, it’s not endin’ til you quit tryin’
to make everybody else whole
It won’t stop til you let it go…

If you’re hooked on somebody else’s problems
Believe me, you’re never gonna solve ‘em
All that ridin’ on their highs and lows
It won’t stop til you let it go…

CHORUS

Can’t rescue anybody else
Til you take the time to save yourself
God knows how hard you’ve tried

CHORUS


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