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Grande Ave Blues

Keith Vincent

July 10, 2017

Genre: Blues

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What I saw on the streets of St. Louis..........

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Keith- thanks for sharing!  Okay, I dig the intro.  That’s cool.  The imagery immediately pulls me in.

Cool groove.  Blues isn’t really my area, so I’ll stop there.  I dig it.  Nice work!

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July 12, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

First of all Keith… this is a work of art. Really super cool. I just love the production and you aced it. The story line and rhyming schemes is right in the pocket.

I don’t really want to criticize it… the only thing that came to mind is that dredlocks is a newer style and I couldn’t see an ‘old man’ in dredlocks. Now I am sure someone will send me a picture and prove me wrong, but it is the only thing in the song that took me out of the dream world you created and had me wondering. And it isn’t a part of the rhyme and could be replaced easily. Maybe “an old man in a trench coat (raincoat)”... I wonder if the singer of the song isn’t a mismatch. A more soulful raspy voice may have better suited the song.

I could have seen this song in the movie “The Fabulous Bakers Boys” with Jeff Bridges walking down an alley past a drunk with a saxophone playing and Bridges having to step over him in an uncaring fashion, all the while making sure he doesn’t lose his cigarette.

Again, your lyrics and rhyming scheme were phenomenal. What a truly odd song… fantastic.

July 12, 2017

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Chris Moore

I’m a newbie on here, and the is the first song I’ve reviewed, so go easy with me…

First up, the intro set the scene beautifully, hooked me and reeled me into the first verse.  I’m not a blues man, but I fell into this song head first and came out smiling.  Beautiful lazy, loose feel to the instrumentals, some great craft in the lyrics - must have taken some time to get them to flow like that.  I can’t fault them, they painted a picture I could swim in and feel all around me.

The only thing I could say is that my musical mind was waiting for something different in the melody once or twice - I had the lyrics in front of me so I knew what was coming from that perspective, maybe could have been a bit more variety in the top line.

Overall it just made me want to go back to the start and walk down that street with you again.  It’s a song that makes you feel something deep, and I love that.

Cheers, Chris

July 13, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

I like the Tom Waits feel of this song. I think you’ve done a good job both lyrically and musically capturing the feel you want. I don’t have a problem with the dreadlocks, but maybe “nickels and dimes” could be updated to “ones and fives,” just based on my observations of sidewalk musicians. Don’t think many people carry change around these days. The only other suggestion I have is to change the last two lines.

BUT NO ONE SEEMS TO PAY HIM NO MIND
THATʼS A CRIME.

It’s very cliched, it sort of contradicts the fact that he’s getting tips (which shows people are paying attention to him) and I think you have a chance to say something unique and perhaps even profound.

July 18, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Keith- thanks for sharing!  Okay, I dig the intro.  That’s cool.  The imagery immediately pulls me in.

Cool groove.  Blues isn’t really my area, so I’ll stop there.  I dig it.  Nice work!

Please pay this forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

July 12, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

First of all Keith… this is a work of art. Really super cool. I just love the production and you aced it. The story line and rhyming schemes is right in the pocket.

I don’t really want to criticize it… the only thing that came to mind is that dredlocks is a newer style and I couldn’t see an ‘old man’ in dredlocks. Now I am sure someone will send me a picture and prove me wrong, but it is the only thing in the song that took me out of the dream world you created and had me wondering. And it isn’t a part of the rhyme and could be replaced easily. Maybe “an old man in a trench coat (raincoat)”... I wonder if the singer of the song isn’t a mismatch. A more soulful raspy voice may have better suited the song.

I could have seen this song in the movie “The Fabulous Bakers Boys” with Jeff Bridges walking down an alley past a drunk with a saxophone playing and Bridges having to step over him in an uncaring fashion, all the while making sure he doesn’t lose his cigarette.

Again, your lyrics and rhyming scheme were phenomenal. What a truly odd song… fantastic.

July 12, 2017

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Chris Moore

I’m a newbie on here, and the is the first song I’ve reviewed, so go easy with me…

First up, the intro set the scene beautifully, hooked me and reeled me into the first verse.  I’m not a blues man, but I fell into this song head first and came out smiling.  Beautiful lazy, loose feel to the instrumentals, some great craft in the lyrics - must have taken some time to get them to flow like that.  I can’t fault them, they painted a picture I could swim in and feel all around me.

The only thing I could say is that my musical mind was waiting for something different in the melody once or twice - I had the lyrics in front of me so I knew what was coming from that perspective, maybe could have been a bit more variety in the top line.

Overall it just made me want to go back to the start and walk down that street with you again.  It’s a song that makes you feel something deep, and I love that.

Cheers, Chris

July 13, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

I like the Tom Waits feel of this song. I think you’ve done a good job both lyrically and musically capturing the feel you want. I don’t have a problem with the dreadlocks, but maybe “nickels and dimes” could be updated to “ones and fives,” just based on my observations of sidewalk musicians. Don’t think many people carry change around these days. The only other suggestion I have is to change the last two lines.

BUT NO ONE SEEMS TO PAY HIM NO MIND
THATʼS A CRIME.

It’s very cliched, it sort of contradicts the fact that he’s getting tips (which shows people are paying attention to him) and I think you have a chance to say something unique and perhaps even profound.

July 18, 2017


Grande Ave Blues

Written by Keith Vincent

SITTIN ON WINDOW LEDGE IN AN ALLEYWAY DOWN ON GRANDE
AN OLD BLACK MAN IN DREDLOCKS
SAXOPHONE IN HAND
HEʼS PLAYIN FOR NICKELS, PLAYIN FOR DIMES
PLAYIN THE BLUES IN THREE QUARTER TIME
BUT NO ONE SEEMS TO PAY HIM NO MIND
THATʼS A CRIME.....

SOME DAYʼS ITʼS FAMINE SOMEDAYS ITS FEAST
SOME DAYS HEʼS A PHANTOM, SOME DAYSʼ HEʼS A BEAST
TO SOME HEʼS A BEGGAR SELLIN OUT FOR A SONG
TO SOME HEʼS A REAL TALENT THAT SOMEHOW WENT WRONG
BUT ASK HIM, HEʼLL TELL YOU HEʼS RIGHT WHERE HE BELONGS
AND HE PLAYS ON, HE PLAYS ON

HEʼS ONE OF A MILLION OUT ON THE STREETS
BARING HIS SOUL WITH A MELODY AND A BEAT
HE DONʼT SEEM TO NOTICE, DONʼT SEEM TO CARE
HEʼS TELLIN HIS STORY WITH FINGERS AND AIR
AT THE END OF THE DAY HE PACKS UP HIS MEAGER WARES
AND DISAPPEARS, TO WHO KNOWS WHERE

SITTIN ON WINDOW LEDGE IN AN ALLEYWAY DOWN ON GRANDE
AN OLD BLACK MAN IN DREDLOCKS
SAXOPHONE IN HAND
HEʼS PLAYIN FOR NICKELS, PLAYIN FOR DIMES
PLAYIN THE BLUES IN THREE QUARTER TIME
BUT NO ONE SEEMS TO PAY HIM NO MIND
THATʼS A CRIME.....

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