Just a sweet little revenge song.....husband's going through a mid-life crisis, changes his look, cheats, gets himself a new black Mercedes - she decides to make that Benz her own!!
Any constructive feedback is welcome!
Okay… I dig it. It has a nice bouncy melody and sounds a little different than what’s currently playing on the radio. It’s got that “Carrie” kind of vibe to it, but feel it needs a few tweaks here and there.
Your syllable count in the lines changed between V1 and V2. It may equal out the same for each verse, but it changes the melody slightly. I think if you could get both verses sounding closer, the song would be better.
Good theme and not something I’ve heard before, but maybe somebody else will see something I missed.
Good job!
Phillip
July 08, 2017
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This is really catchy! Love the beat, my toes were tapping the whole time I was listening. I love the vibe behind it and LOVE the stick it to you attitude!
September 21, 2017
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So sorry for the late response, but thank you! I’m having
Issues with my phone/computer, so I promise to be more timely with my gratitude!!
January 28, 2018
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You ditched your suits for ripped jeans and boots
While our white picket fence burned down
Caught ya hitt'in on some lady in your new black Mercedes
I'll get that Benz from ya somehow
Found ticket stubs to a movie I ain't never seen
Perfume on your shirt from some sweet young thing
It sure ain't mine!
I always wanted a lipstick red Mercedes Benz
It's just so "moi", I be like ooo, la, la, in the wind
New custom paint like my lipstick shade
Me and Benz we'll be tailor made
You didn't do me in with your little sin
Gonna get my lipstick red Mercedes Benz
That's right
You witnessed my delight when the judge took my side
Now I'm dangling your keys
I got the go ahead to paint it lipstick red and oh,
It looks so good on me
How's that mid-life crisis working out?
Well, I'm in your driver's seat now
Here's how I roll
I always wanted a lipstick red Mercedes Benz
It's just so "moi", I be like ooo, la, la, in the wind
New custom paint like my lipstick shade
Me and Benz we'll be tailor made
You didn't do me in with your little sin
I got my lipstick red Mercedes Benz
I got my lipstick red Mercedes Benz
I got my lipstick red Mercedes Benz
Let's go........ha....ha!
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Hi Kris! Welcome to Frettie!
This sounds like a fun, bouncy song, but would love to see the lyrics rather than trying to figure them out. If you login and choose the song, you can add the lyrics under “edit song details”, then copy and paste them in.
Phillip
July 08, 2017
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Okay… I dig it. It has a nice bouncy melody and sounds a little different than what’s currently playing on the radio. It’s got that “Carrie” kind of vibe to it, but feel it needs a few tweaks here and there.
Your syllable count in the lines changed between V1 and V2. It may equal out the same for each verse, but it changes the melody slightly. I think if you could get both verses sounding closer, the song would be better.
Good theme and not something I’ve heard before, but maybe somebody else will see something I missed.
Good job!
Phillip
July 08, 2017
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This is really catchy! Love the beat, my toes were tapping the whole time I was listening. I love the vibe behind it and LOVE the stick it to you attitude!
September 21, 2017
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So sorry for the late response, but thank you! I’m having
Issues with my phone/computer, so I promise to be more timely with my gratitude!!
January 28, 2018
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Phillip Lemmonds
Hi Kris! Welcome to Frettie!
This sounds like a fun, bouncy song, but would love to see the lyrics rather than trying to figure them out. If you login and choose the song, you can add the lyrics under “edit song details”, then copy and paste them in.
Phillip
July 08, 2017
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