This is a song written as an affirmation of what every woman already knows, and every man needs to learn.
Thanks Robert for listening, and for the positive feedback.
I have been writing for many years, but decided to get serious about it about 10 years ago. I have yet to be blessed with a major cut, but will continue working towards that goal.
July 03, 2017
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That’s a really good song Marvin, and there are some surprising chord changes .I like your writing it is quite refreshing, and I think it’s much better than some of the stuff coming out of Nashville; which proves that it is hard to get a hit in Nashville. I sometimes don’t think these guys are listening with both ears, of course I am old school 70’s 80’s 90’s and the stuff today as it is with all Music is geared towards the kids, since they are the ones who buy the records which probably don’t even exist anymore. I actually hear country rap these days, probably a new genre’ which the kids like.
April 02, 2018
OK—I think you need to get in touch with Ronnie Milsap, and I don’t mean tomorrow, I mean right this moment—I think this song grabs your attention from the very start, and doesn’t let go—Wish I’d written this one—HA!!! I really liked this one from the word “Go”!!! This one, imho, holds up in any company (as songs go)—I hope you’ll really push this one—I think it could really be commercially successful, and largely because it tells the simple basic story of the human heart! Ok, you can tell I really liked this one—HA!!! Go get ‘em!!!
July 21, 2018
Awesome song Marvin! You continue to amaze me with your writing and if you’re doing the arrangements and tracks, phenomenal job!
October 16, 2018
Thanks Joseph, Bob and Reid for listening and commenting. I would love to hear Ronnie Milsap or Ronnie Dunn sing this song.
October 18, 2018
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Marvin, this song is absolutely splendid. You are a tremendous writer with such talent. Beautiful story that I know so many of us can relate to. Heartache set to music, and done so in a poetic and compelling way. I’ve listened to the song several times, and frankly, it leaves me with a tear. That’s the beauty of music, and your song has captured that something that touches the soul. The words are so expressive, and even though the subject matter is timeless, you’ve found a way to express it in a unique and beautiful way. I hear Ronnie Dunn knocking this out of the park. Wish I could get it to him myself. Keep up the great work my friend, you exemplify songwriting at it’s best. As Joseph said, this is better than a lot of what’s coming out of Nashville. Fabulous!
April 23, 2019
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Thanks Jeffrey for listening and for your thoughts. We all love writing ballads, and every once in a while everything lines up perfectly between the lyric and the music. This was one of those songs for me. I would love to hear Ronnie Dunn’s expressive vocal on this song as well. Thanks again for your kind comments.
April 24, 2019
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Marvin well what can I say I have loved everything you have written since I came on board here and you are very talented at writing and bringing out a lot of emotion in your stories you tell. Another masterpiece my friend!!! Cant wait for the next one……...
May 07, 2020
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Sittin’ in the dark all alone
Readin’ over what she says is wrong
My heart explodes with every breath as I memorize the note she left behind
I know every word from before
Cause everything I’ve heard and just ignored
She said I need someone who’s not afraid to lean on me sometimes
If I had listened to what she tried to say
Opened up my heart before it was to late
I would have realized what she was missin’
If only I had listened
She said I prayed for change and you to hear
How every day’s the same, the weeks, the years
I miss that old desire that burns inside like fire when love is new
I think you’ll realize after I’m gone
This emptiness inside just can’t go on
I hope you find someday someone who makes you feel the way we used to
If I had listened to what she tried to say
Opened up my heart before it was to late
I would have realized what she was missin’
If I had listened with more than just my ears
I’d be holdin’ her instead of sittin’ here
I should have realized what I’d be missin’
If only I had listened
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Marvin…
This is a super ballad (excellent singer BTW) and I could see someone taking this one big time. By the way, your demo recording quality is consistently very nice and top shelf. And I like the story line but I really really like the music, melody and the chord changes that aren’t the same ole same ole… Very nice.
By the way, it appears you have only been writing for a few years? Interesting and maybe inspiring for other people that for whatever reason may have a talent here but never tried to write before. You are a story in itself.
July 02, 2017
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Thanks Robert for listening, and for the positive feedback.
I have been writing for many years, but decided to get serious about it about 10 years ago. I have yet to be blessed with a major cut, but will continue working towards that goal.
July 03, 2017
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That’s a really good song Marvin, and there are some surprising chord changes .I like your writing it is quite refreshing, and I think it’s much better than some of the stuff coming out of Nashville; which proves that it is hard to get a hit in Nashville. I sometimes don’t think these guys are listening with both ears, of course I am old school 70’s 80’s 90’s and the stuff today as it is with all Music is geared towards the kids, since they are the ones who buy the records which probably don’t even exist anymore. I actually hear country rap these days, probably a new genre’ which the kids like.
April 02, 2018
1
OK—I think you need to get in touch with Ronnie Milsap, and I don’t mean tomorrow, I mean right this moment—I think this song grabs your attention from the very start, and doesn’t let go—Wish I’d written this one—HA!!! I really liked this one from the word “Go”!!! This one, imho, holds up in any company (as songs go)—I hope you’ll really push this one—I think it could really be commercially successful, and largely because it tells the simple basic story of the human heart! Ok, you can tell I really liked this one—HA!!! Go get ‘em!!!
July 21, 2018
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Awesome song Marvin! You continue to amaze me with your writing and if you’re doing the arrangements and tracks, phenomenal job!
October 16, 2018
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Thanks Joseph, Bob and Reid for listening and commenting. I would love to hear Ronnie Milsap or Ronnie Dunn sing this song.
October 18, 2018
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Marvin, this song is absolutely splendid. You are a tremendous writer with such talent. Beautiful story that I know so many of us can relate to. Heartache set to music, and done so in a poetic and compelling way. I’ve listened to the song several times, and frankly, it leaves me with a tear. That’s the beauty of music, and your song has captured that something that touches the soul. The words are so expressive, and even though the subject matter is timeless, you’ve found a way to express it in a unique and beautiful way. I hear Ronnie Dunn knocking this out of the park. Wish I could get it to him myself. Keep up the great work my friend, you exemplify songwriting at it’s best. As Joseph said, this is better than a lot of what’s coming out of Nashville. Fabulous!
April 23, 2019
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Thanks Jeffrey for listening and for your thoughts. We all love writing ballads, and every once in a while everything lines up perfectly between the lyric and the music. This was one of those songs for me. I would love to hear Ronnie Dunn’s expressive vocal on this song as well. Thanks again for your kind comments.
April 24, 2019
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Marvin well what can I say I have loved everything you have written since I came on board here and you are very talented at writing and bringing out a lot of emotion in your stories you tell. Another masterpiece my friend!!! Cant wait for the next one……...
May 07, 2020
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Marvin…
This is a super ballad (excellent singer BTW) and I could see someone taking this one big time. By the way, your demo recording quality is consistently very nice and top shelf. And I like the story line but I really really like the music, melody and the chord changes that aren’t the same ole same ole… Very nice.
By the way, it appears you have only been writing for a few years? Interesting and maybe inspiring for other people that for whatever reason may have a talent here but never tried to write before. You are a story in itself.
July 02, 2017