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Mirror

Mikalyn Hay

June 26, 2017

Genre: Pop

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Murray Daigle and Bobby John and I sat in the studio and wrote the song together. Murray came up with the beat and Bobby and I started with the song idea and the lyric.

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For the frettie listener - does the song need more story or is it fine the way it is.


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Jackson Lucas

Hey Mikalyn,

Pop is not my usual area of interest, but I like your song a lot. The melody and your delivery stood out most.

From what I have read and heard, pop producers seem to use demo backing tracks a lot, so my advice would be to beef up the track, which is a bit sparse at the moment. That would increase your chances of being picked up, I hope: if you listen to Lorde you will hear that on some tracks there is quite a bit going on.

Hope this helps.
Be well,
Jackson

P.S. Check out my country stuff, if you’d like…

June 26, 2017

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Charles Cater

Mikalyn,

I really like the feel of this song. The melody is memorable with good repetition. I think the story is sufficient as is since it seems to be about feelings and emotions rather than a specific event. Let the imagination fill in the rest…

Chuck

June 26, 2017

Mikalyn Hay

Hi Jackson, Charles - thanks for the feedback - very cool to get feedback.  I am huge fan of Lorde - but also the weekend where the tracks are sparse.  I did do about 8 layers of vocals on Mirror but Murray choose to keep it sparser.  Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and comment.

June 26, 2017

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Jackson Lucas

Hey Mikalyn,

Pop is not my usual area of interest, but I like your song a lot. The melody and your delivery stood out most.

From what I have read and heard, pop producers seem to use demo backing tracks a lot, so my advice would be to beef up the track, which is a bit sparse at the moment. That would increase your chances of being picked up, I hope: if you listen to Lorde you will hear that on some tracks there is quite a bit going on.

Hope this helps.
Be well,
Jackson

P.S. Check out my country stuff, if you’d like…

June 26, 2017

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Charles Cater

Mikalyn,

I really like the feel of this song. The melody is memorable with good repetition. I think the story is sufficient as is since it seems to be about feelings and emotions rather than a specific event. Let the imagination fill in the rest…

Chuck

June 26, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Hi Jackson, Charles - thanks for the feedback - very cool to get feedback.  I am huge fan of Lorde - but also the weekend where the tracks are sparse.  I did do about 8 layers of vocals on Mirror but Murray choose to keep it sparser.  Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and comment.

June 26, 2017


Mirror - Mikalyn Hay, Murray Daigle and Bobby John
Verse 1
I dove right in
Didn't bring a parachute, fell right through, hit the water hard
Moving too fast,
Spiraling out of control, was touch and go, went a little far

Pre
You, you taught me how to turn a blind eye
I showed you how to keep a shoulder cold
no, no one walks away without a scar scar scar

Chorus
I've been digging through the pieces
Your heart is out of reach but
objects may seem nearer
through this rippled mirror

Verse 2
Try to erase,
the ink that's left upon my chest,
i'll attest, i don't really want to forget to forget

PRE
CHORUS
PRE
CHORUS

Outro
I dove right in

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