This was a Thursday word/lyric challenge by Brent for writing off a title given. He gave us (that wanted to play this today) the title "I'm Picking Up A New Old Habit" and so I thought I would maybe do a verse. Then a bridge. Then a chorus, oh heck I wrote the song lyrically. Then I just couldn't resist, and I put it to music. Then I couldn't resist making a guitar/vocal of it so here it is.
There is very little re-write here so it's really naked and if I wanted to do so, I would take a few days of re-write, give it a rest, and re-write. But I actually like it and it would be fun to record and really give it an energy shot as it fits my voice easily.
Pound away... there's plenty of room here! LOL
Thanks Brent… and yes, this was a write, compose, record and then post to this site all in about 2 hours. And I wrote another great song in the morning so it was a good day with the music. My wife and I worked up another verse (it needed one as the song was under 2 minutes as is) and so here is Verse 2 explaining the “girl in question” has some issues but he just loves her! Thanks for the advise.
I will probably do a full demo on this one as it might have some merit in the marketplace, and it’s a fun song and fun for an artist to sing.
June 23, 2017
Hey Robert, it’s a positive tempo song, so that is always a plus. I feel like there is detail missing. You could grab the listener’s attention right away with some imagery/detail that lets us feel why he is feeling the way he is… help us visualize what he is seeing, hearing, touching, feeling to help put us in the scene and understand. Ie… why is your daddy saying this? What about her makes you say that you have it good…? Why do all the boys love her and what makes her nasty, sassy and bitterweet? I think waiting til the second verse or later in the song is too late. As a listener I would want to be put into his scene/feelings right away. Just my two cents.
>>>>My daddy told me she’s bad, “dagnabbit”...
But no knows how good I have it…
Boys all love her, and think she’s really neat…
But she’s nasty and sassy and bittersweet…<<<<
June 25, 2017
Thanks Jayne… this was basically a rhyming challenge bit from last Thursday. Then it was a bit interesting, then a bit more, and then I put music to it, then I decided a quick guitar-vocal and then I stopped. All in about 2 hours. Then Brent suggested more about the girl or why the hubbub about her so I did the second verse and updated the lyrics but left the demo as is.
I’m thinking this can’t be too intellectual or story line sensitive and more like just some splashes of fun lines to sing and listen to. Or, I’m a bit lazy and not going further. But I have so many things pulling on me and other songs I haven’t started recording I believe have precedent. Should I do a full demo I will sit down and probably do what you have stated or certainly look close at any rewriting for the demo.
Thanks Jayne! Love your stuff girl.
June 25, 2017
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Whoa… I want to apologize for leaving the extra O out of Good Bad Habit in this title. It just looks bad. Sorry again.
June 27, 2017
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I really like the up-tempo in this song. you made it a lot of fun and it was really enjoyable. I read Jayne and Brent’s comments and agree add things about her that make her so good, but bad. There’s not a whole lot I could add, but only a thought I had while listening. I think it may be good to hold off on saying I’m picking up a good bad habit in the first verse and use it for your chorus. In the first verse you could do a description of her, and then go into why things are so good, but bad.haha, I like your line, my daddy told me she’s bad dagnabbit you really did a great job with that challenge-I really liked the energy in the song, seemed like it suited you really well.
July 06, 2017
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love the rhymes in this Robert…some are hard rhymes, some soft, some two-syllable matched with two one-syllable words; very cool!
July 13, 2017
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Thanks Mr Dave… I think I will be doing a full demo in the next several days on this one and I will post it again when finished.
July 13, 2017
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“I’m Picking Up A Good Bad Habit”
Written by Robert Lloyd (6-22-17)
(Verse 1)
E
I’m picking up a good bad habit…
B A E
Maybe it's new, but seems I've always had it...
E
Like a big old hook and my heart will nab it...
B D A E
Again, I'm picking up a good bad habit...
(Verse 2)
My daddy told me she's bad, “dagnabbit”...
But no knows how good I have it...
Boys all love her, and think she's really neat...
But she's nasty and sassy and bittersweet...
(Bridge)
A
Everyone knows now I've got the fix...
B
Really never goes away, I'm chomping at the bit...
A7
Someone should have warned me, it comes back real quick
B7
I could have run... instead I'm up the creek. (as in hick)
(Chorus)
E
I'm picking up a good bad habit...
B D A E
Someone please help me... now she's back again...
E
Same 'ole thing, seems I gotta keep at it...
B D A E
Loving her, is like a good bad habit...
(Verse 3)
Won't stand in line and won't take my turn...
Just the thought of her cause my soul to yearn...
When it comes to her I never live and learn...
Just the thought of her, my heart starts to burn...
(Repeat bridge, chorus and out)
1
Wow, Robert! LOVE to see you taking Songwriting Pro’s “Wordplay Thursday” and RUNNING with it!
I like that it’s grooving and fun. Feels good. Ya know, I think you have a good opportunity to focus on HER a little more- what’s she like or what’s she do that makes her a bad habit. You focus a lot on how she affects you, but not WHY or what she does that affects you. As such, on some level, you haven’t PROVEN that she’s a bad habit.
Yep. Prove to us, show us the evidence, that she’s a BAD habit (vs. a good one), and I think it’ll strengthen you song.
I hope that helps! Pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
June 23, 2017
1
Thanks Brent… and yes, this was a write, compose, record and then post to this site all in about 2 hours. And I wrote another great song in the morning so it was a good day with the music. My wife and I worked up another verse (it needed one as the song was under 2 minutes as is) and so here is Verse 2 explaining the “girl in question” has some issues but he just loves her! Thanks for the advise.
I will probably do a full demo on this one as it might have some merit in the marketplace, and it’s a fun song and fun for an artist to sing.
June 23, 2017
1
Hey Robert, it’s a positive tempo song, so that is always a plus. I feel like there is detail missing. You could grab the listener’s attention right away with some imagery/detail that lets us feel why he is feeling the way he is… help us visualize what he is seeing, hearing, touching, feeling to help put us in the scene and understand. Ie… why is your daddy saying this? What about her makes you say that you have it good…? Why do all the boys love her and what makes her nasty, sassy and bitterweet? I think waiting til the second verse or later in the song is too late. As a listener I would want to be put into his scene/feelings right away. Just my two cents.
>>>>My daddy told me she’s bad, “dagnabbit”...
But no knows how good I have it…
Boys all love her, and think she’s really neat…
But she’s nasty and sassy and bittersweet…<<<<
June 25, 2017
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Thanks Jayne… this was basically a rhyming challenge bit from last Thursday. Then it was a bit interesting, then a bit more, and then I put music to it, then I decided a quick guitar-vocal and then I stopped. All in about 2 hours. Then Brent suggested more about the girl or why the hubbub about her so I did the second verse and updated the lyrics but left the demo as is.
I’m thinking this can’t be too intellectual or story line sensitive and more like just some splashes of fun lines to sing and listen to. Or, I’m a bit lazy and not going further. But I have so many things pulling on me and other songs I haven’t started recording I believe have precedent. Should I do a full demo I will sit down and probably do what you have stated or certainly look close at any rewriting for the demo.
Thanks Jayne! Love your stuff girl.
June 25, 2017
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Whoa… I want to apologize for leaving the extra O out of Good Bad Habit in this title. It just looks bad. Sorry again.
June 27, 2017
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I really like the up-tempo in this song. you made it a lot of fun and it was really enjoyable. I read Jayne and Brent’s comments and agree add things about her that make her so good, but bad. There’s not a whole lot I could add, but only a thought I had while listening. I think it may be good to hold off on saying I’m picking up a good bad habit in the first verse and use it for your chorus. In the first verse you could do a description of her, and then go into why things are so good, but bad.haha, I like your line, my daddy told me she’s bad dagnabbit you really did a great job with that challenge-I really liked the energy in the song, seemed like it suited you really well.
July 06, 2017
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love the rhymes in this Robert…some are hard rhymes, some soft, some two-syllable matched with two one-syllable words; very cool!
July 13, 2017
0
Thanks Mr Dave… I think I will be doing a full demo in the next several days on this one and I will post it again when finished.
July 13, 2017
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Brent Baxter
Wow, Robert! LOVE to see you taking Songwriting Pro’s “Wordplay Thursday” and RUNNING with it!
I like that it’s grooving and fun. Feels good. Ya know, I think you have a good opportunity to focus on HER a little more- what’s she like or what’s she do that makes her a bad habit. You focus a lot on how she affects you, but not WHY or what she does that affects you. As such, on some level, you haven’t PROVEN that she’s a bad habit.
Yep. Prove to us, show us the evidence, that she’s a BAD habit (vs. a good one), and I think it’ll strengthen you song.
I hope that helps! Pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song. Thanks!
June 23, 2017