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Whatever Will Be

Martin Lorentzson

June 21, 2017

Genre: Folk

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Hi there! Whatever Will Be is song (and a co-write) that came to life during a songwriting retreat in Pidgeon Forge, TN. The assignment was to write something that could be featured in a movie. No other context was given. Storyline: woman reflects on her life, getting a notion (through observations) that her life is about to change. She doesn't know what's ahead of her, if it'll be good or bad, but that's alright: "Whatever will be will be". At the moment, we're revising the lyrics to see if we can make them more coherent. Best, Martin

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Michael R. J. Roth

The music has a nice feel to it, and I like your voice (assuming your are singing). The lyric seems like a first draft, not clear what/who you are talking about, a lover or God perhaps, and it could benefit by some storytelling, even if it’s condensed. Verse 2 is a bit mystical, no idea what the good way to live the wind is suggesting. But I think it’s a good start and you should build on it. It’s got a pleasing melody that draws you in gently. I’d like to see more.

June 22, 2017

Michael R. J. Roth

Should have noted your name before I wrote that. Good choice of singer.

June 22, 2017

Martin Lorentzson

Thanks Michael for taking your time to listen and share your feedback.

Agree with what you’re saying – it needs to convey a stronger story. It’s a good reminder that a great song is combination of outstanding melody AND lyrics.

The singer,Katie Colosimo,is based in Nashville and also one the co-writers.

June 23, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hi, Martin!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I dig the feel.  However, the lyric has me lost.  I get that it was written for a different target, and I agree that the lyric can use some tightening.  It feels positive, so go with something (lyrically) that feels as good as the music and production feel.

I don’t have specific suggestions for where the story should go.  I think it’s wide open at this point- just go with something that moves you.  And good luck!

Please pay it forward by leaving a comment or feedback on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

June 25, 2017

Martin Lorentzson

Hi Brent!

Thanks for listening and sharing your feedback. Yeah, the lyrics need to be fixed. Appreciate what you’re saying about building something with “a positive feel”. Will have this in mind when re-writing the lyrics with my co-writers. Paying it forward: Yes, I definitely will.

June 26, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Cool song for sure - like the others comments its a song that is very much up to the listener to figure out.  Which is fine by me but I can understand lots of people might look for more story.  Thanks for sharing

June 26, 2017

Martin Lorentzson

Hi Mikalyn!

Thanks for your feedback, appreciate it! Hopefully, I’m able to post a new version soon.

June 26, 2017

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Rusty Perez

Martin, this melody, the production, the performance is beautiful. It’s relaxing and mesmerizing. It reminds me a bit of the band Fairground Attraction. 
I imagine that you might have rewritten this already, but it has an ethereal quality which goes with the nebulous lyrics.

I notice that the vocal part drops behind the rhythm toward the end of the song. It works and is really cool.

December 07, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

The music has a nice feel to it, and I like your voice (assuming your are singing). The lyric seems like a first draft, not clear what/who you are talking about, a lover or God perhaps, and it could benefit by some storytelling, even if it’s condensed. Verse 2 is a bit mystical, no idea what the good way to live the wind is suggesting. But I think it’s a good start and you should build on it. It’s got a pleasing melody that draws you in gently. I’d like to see more.

June 22, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Should have noted your name before I wrote that. Good choice of singer.

June 22, 2017

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Martin Lorentzson

Thanks Michael for taking your time to listen and share your feedback.

Agree with what you’re saying – it needs to convey a stronger story. It’s a good reminder that a great song is combination of outstanding melody AND lyrics.

The singer,Katie Colosimo,is based in Nashville and also one the co-writers.

June 23, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hi, Martin!  Thanks for sharing your song.  I dig the feel.  However, the lyric has me lost.  I get that it was written for a different target, and I agree that the lyric can use some tightening.  It feels positive, so go with something (lyrically) that feels as good as the music and production feel.

I don’t have specific suggestions for where the story should go.  I think it’s wide open at this point- just go with something that moves you.  And good luck!

Please pay it forward by leaving a comment or feedback on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

June 25, 2017

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Martin Lorentzson

Hi Brent!

Thanks for listening and sharing your feedback. Yeah, the lyrics need to be fixed. Appreciate what you’re saying about building something with “a positive feel”. Will have this in mind when re-writing the lyrics with my co-writers. Paying it forward: Yes, I definitely will.

June 26, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Cool song for sure - like the others comments its a song that is very much up to the listener to figure out.  Which is fine by me but I can understand lots of people might look for more story.  Thanks for sharing

June 26, 2017

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Martin Lorentzson

Hi Mikalyn!

Thanks for your feedback, appreciate it! Hopefully, I’m able to post a new version soon.

June 26, 2017

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Rusty Perez

Martin, this melody, the production, the performance is beautiful. It’s relaxing and mesmerizing. It reminds me a bit of the band Fairground Attraction. 
I imagine that you might have rewritten this already, but it has an ethereal quality which goes with the nebulous lyrics.

I notice that the vocal part drops behind the rhythm toward the end of the song. It works and is really cool.

December 07, 2017


Verse 1
I don’t know where you are but I feel you
Maybe that’s the reason you left
All my doubts unravel with the seasons
Maybe I’ll be the reason you stay

Chorus
‘Cause I see colors in the trees
But I don’t know what that means to me
Insanity or clarity
Whatever will be will be

Verse 2
I don’t know what I saw but I thought I passed you
Maybe that’s the moment I missed
Suddenly the wind has changed direction
Showing me a good way to live

Chorus
And I see colors in the trees
But I don’t know what that means to me
Insanity or clarity
Whatever will be will be

Chorus
I see colors in the trees
But I don’t know what that means to me
I see beauty in everything
But I don’t know what that means to me
Whatever will be will be

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