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Forever Could

Dave Quirk

June 16, 2017

Genre: Country

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Co-written w/Natalia Mount - she's singing on the demo.

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Dave!  Thanks for sharing!  I like the idea.  Feels fresh.  I like it.  I like the feel.  Feels current.  Good work.  I like the singer, too.

However, I’d like to hear “Forever Could” be repeated and emphasized more in the chorus.  It kinda flies by on the first line and disappears for most of the chorus.  I’d like to hear the title replace at least one of the “it"s in the chorus.

The big thing for me is your choice of story.  It’s a fine story.  (Probably the only thing I’d change is going from the wedding day to the boy showing his mom the ring he’s picked out and her giving him this advice BEFORE he pops the question.  It’s kinda late in the game to be giving him this advice on his wedding day.)

But the big thing for me is that, if you want to get this cut by a major artist, you’ve disqualified all of the current major female artists.  How many of them will sing about having a son old enough to get married?  I think your choice of angle is going to make it really hard to get it cut.  There just aren’t many females who will sing from this “age.”

However, the heart of the idea is that “Forever Could” mean many things.  That idea plus the feel make me want to hear this from a young female’s perspective.  Maybe the guy did a “U+Me 4ever” kinda thing, and the girl is like, “That’s awesome.  I did you, too.  But forever could mean all kinds of things.”  Then chorus.  It’s a guy wooing her maybe, and she’s like “do you REALLY mean it?”  A little sassy, but ultimately positive and with some (hidden) depth about “hey, we’re young, we don’t have to be so serious” or “be careful how you speak to us girls, ‘cuz you can break our hearts by not meaning forever the way we think you do.”

Just some thoughts.  Hope it helps.  There’s a lot of good work in this.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song!

June 16, 2017

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Michael Roth

First off, I really liked this song. It has a cool Taylor Swift vibe, and I love the singer’s voice. I couldn’t figure out what it was about on first listen, but these are very meaty lyrics, lots of substance, something I personally like. It does take a while to figure out what’s going on, though: who is the speaker, what’s the story going on. And it raised questions for me, like, what is this mother’s story? It hints at some bitterness towards the boy’s (absent) father, and a too-subtle irony in the narrative. Also, she seems to be much older than the singer sounds.

But I loved it anyway. : )

June 16, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Great song guys - Loved it smile

June 16, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Dave!  Thanks for sharing!  I like the idea.  Feels fresh.  I like it.  I like the feel.  Feels current.  Good work.  I like the singer, too.

However, I’d like to hear “Forever Could” be repeated and emphasized more in the chorus.  It kinda flies by on the first line and disappears for most of the chorus.  I’d like to hear the title replace at least one of the “it"s in the chorus.

The big thing for me is your choice of story.  It’s a fine story.  (Probably the only thing I’d change is going from the wedding day to the boy showing his mom the ring he’s picked out and her giving him this advice BEFORE he pops the question.  It’s kinda late in the game to be giving him this advice on his wedding day.)

But the big thing for me is that, if you want to get this cut by a major artist, you’ve disqualified all of the current major female artists.  How many of them will sing about having a son old enough to get married?  I think your choice of angle is going to make it really hard to get it cut.  There just aren’t many females who will sing from this “age.”

However, the heart of the idea is that “Forever Could” mean many things.  That idea plus the feel make me want to hear this from a young female’s perspective.  Maybe the guy did a “U+Me 4ever” kinda thing, and the girl is like, “That’s awesome.  I did you, too.  But forever could mean all kinds of things.”  Then chorus.  It’s a guy wooing her maybe, and she’s like “do you REALLY mean it?”  A little sassy, but ultimately positive and with some (hidden) depth about “hey, we’re young, we don’t have to be so serious” or “be careful how you speak to us girls, ‘cuz you can break our hearts by not meaning forever the way we think you do.”

Just some thoughts.  Hope it helps.  There’s a lot of good work in this.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on another writer’s song!

June 16, 2017

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Michael Roth

First off, I really liked this song. It has a cool Taylor Swift vibe, and I love the singer’s voice. I couldn’t figure out what it was about on first listen, but these are very meaty lyrics, lots of substance, something I personally like. It does take a while to figure out what’s going on, though: who is the speaker, what’s the story going on. And it raised questions for me, like, what is this mother’s story? It hints at some bitterness towards the boy’s (absent) father, and a too-subtle irony in the narrative. Also, she seems to be much older than the singer sounds.

But I loved it anyway. : )

June 16, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Great song guys - Loved it smile

June 16, 2017


Forever Could

Written by Dave Quirk

Valentine’s Day, 4th grade
I can tell my boy’s been waiting for this day
He rushed me to the drugstore
Got all the hearts and candy we were looking for
Then he said, he needed one thing more
On his tiptoes to grab a card
That said “Forever Girl” on a big red heart
I knew I had to make sure, he knew the power of that word, that

Chorus
Forever Could be just a thing you're throwin out there
It could mean nothing and go nowhere
It could be something that you dont ever say
But dont even need to
Cuz when it’s real, and you say it the way you should
Then Forever Could, Forever Could
Mean everything, mean everything

Wedding day, early May
I can tell my boy’s been nervous for this day
He wanted help with his bow tie
Looked at me with his heart in his eyes
Asked me for a little last-second advice
And I had to make sure, he knew the power of that word, cuz (chorus)

Bridge
It’s more than just 7 letters
Yeah, more powerful than 4….

Final Chorus
Cuz, Forever Could be just a thing you're throwin out there
It could mean nothing and go nowhere
It could be something that you dont ever say, but dont even need to
Forever could be something that you’re not looking for
It could mean you’re not looking anymore
It could be all you ever think about, but doesn’t happen for you
Cuz when it’s real, and you say it the way you should
Then Forever Could, Forever Could
Mean everything, mean everything
Forever Could

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