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My Country Heart Lives in Tennessee (Work in Progress)

David Pritchett

June 06, 2017

Genre: Country

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Story about a man who follows his lady out west but misses his country home in Tenessee

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Anything as this is a Work In Progress and any comments will be appreciated.


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Robert Lloyd

Hello David…

First of all David… I can hear you should have put a capo up on the second fret and would have fit your voice perfectly. Though you probably don’t have a pro voice, you have a good voice for a songwriter doing a guitar-vocal. Good job.

I can hear the full production as I am listening. I can hear pure country harmonies in the chorus and almost a John Denver style maybe. And again, your voice would have been perfect sung a little higher key. And I like songs that yearn for a better place like Nashville. Always a good story line for a song. Kind of a ditty, yes, but a good one. I might suggest putting a few additional chords in, maybe a minor chord or something and it might come alive a bit more. Maybe an Em chord to start the chorus but you would not have to change the melody at all I believe.

June 06, 2017

Robert Lloyd

I see you have the minor in the verse and then you could do it again starting the chorus???? Something to mix it up differently and unexpectedly. Maybe not. Just mulling it over. Good job.

June 06, 2017

Phillip Lemmonds

Hi David!  Haven’t listened to the music yet, don’t want to disturb anybody around me, but reading through the lyrics, first thing I’d suggest is shorten the title to “My Country Heart”.

It feels like there’s a couple of cliches in the lyrics.  Since this is a work in progress, I’d suggest reading through the lyrics for Bo Bice’s song “Take the Country Outta Me”.  Like I said, I haven’t listened yet, but the lyrics are similar.

Phillip

June 06, 2017

David Pritchett

Hi Robert,  Thanks for your feedback! smile I’ll pass what you said along to the musician/singer (Jeff Wisnom) as it’s not me. I wrote the lyrics.

Hi Phillip, Thanks for your feedback smile  I never heard Bo’s song until you said check it out. I did not copy anything and I never would well not on purpose.  Only two lines are similar but their not exact so I’ll have to think about if I feel I need to change and how much or rewrite them completely. It is a work in progress so now is the time to make decisions. I take it as a compliment that my writing is getting better if I came up with smilar lines from another song by an established Artist.

June 08, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

David, I wasn’t implying you copied anything… sometimes good ideas come to more than one person.  I thought the line sounded familiar, might have been from the old Salem TV commercial (You can take Salem out of the country but you can’t take the country out of Salem).  I did an internet search and found Bo’s song and wanted to make you aware of it.

Phillip

June 08, 2017

David Pritchett

Hi Phillip,  I never thought that you were implying anything.  I appreciate knowing and I do appreciate you taking the time to search it out and make me aware of it.  Thank you so much.  I was jjust saying I never would do it intentionally cause I’m not that kind of writer.  smile  And i agree good ideas do come to more than one person once it’s out there it is easier to pick up on.
Thanks again Phillip, Have a great day smile

June 08, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

Hello David…

First of all David… I can hear you should have put a capo up on the second fret and would have fit your voice perfectly. Though you probably don’t have a pro voice, you have a good voice for a songwriter doing a guitar-vocal. Good job.

I can hear the full production as I am listening. I can hear pure country harmonies in the chorus and almost a John Denver style maybe. And again, your voice would have been perfect sung a little higher key. And I like songs that yearn for a better place like Nashville. Always a good story line for a song. Kind of a ditty, yes, but a good one. I might suggest putting a few additional chords in, maybe a minor chord or something and it might come alive a bit more. Maybe an Em chord to start the chorus but you would not have to change the melody at all I believe.

June 06, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

I see you have the minor in the verse and then you could do it again starting the chorus???? Something to mix it up differently and unexpectedly. Maybe not. Just mulling it over. Good job.

June 06, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

Hi David!  Haven’t listened to the music yet, don’t want to disturb anybody around me, but reading through the lyrics, first thing I’d suggest is shorten the title to “My Country Heart”.

It feels like there’s a couple of cliches in the lyrics.  Since this is a work in progress, I’d suggest reading through the lyrics for Bo Bice’s song “Take the Country Outta Me”.  Like I said, I haven’t listened yet, but the lyrics are similar.

Phillip

June 06, 2017

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David Pritchett

Hi Robert,  Thanks for your feedback! smile I’ll pass what you said along to the musician/singer (Jeff Wisnom) as it’s not me. I wrote the lyrics.

Hi Phillip, Thanks for your feedback smile  I never heard Bo’s song until you said check it out. I did not copy anything and I never would well not on purpose.  Only two lines are similar but their not exact so I’ll have to think about if I feel I need to change and how much or rewrite them completely. It is a work in progress so now is the time to make decisions. I take it as a compliment that my writing is getting better if I came up with smilar lines from another song by an established Artist.

June 08, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

David, I wasn’t implying you copied anything… sometimes good ideas come to more than one person.  I thought the line sounded familiar, might have been from the old Salem TV commercial (You can take Salem out of the country but you can’t take the country out of Salem).  I did an internet search and found Bo’s song and wanted to make you aware of it.

Phillip

June 08, 2017

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David Pritchett

Hi Phillip,  I never thought that you were implying anything.  I appreciate knowing and I do appreciate you taking the time to search it out and make me aware of it.  Thank you so much.  I was jjust saying I never would do it intentionally cause I’m not that kind of writer.  smile  And i agree good ideas do come to more than one person once it’s out there it is easier to pick up on.
Thanks again Phillip, Have a great day smile

June 08, 2017


My Country Heart Lives in...

Written by David Pritchett

My Country Heart Lives in Tennessee

V1
You pulled me out west down a movie highway
Believing dreams come true but I felt so far away
From my country home and my love began to stray
Living in Hollywood for some might be divine
For me it’s not so fine, life is not a straight line
Always being in the sun will burn you in time

CHORUS
Yeah, you took me out of the country
But you can never take the country out of me
I’m living two thousand miles from Nashville Tennessee
My heart doesn’t question where I’d rather be
Cause my country heart lives in Tennessee

V2
While you’re chasing a Hollywood Star set in stone
I’m listening to songs by Cash, Nelson and Jones
Transporting and reminding me of my country home
Singin along with country songs I feel young ‘n’ free
I miss my country roots and all my rowdy friends
When my heart visits Tennessee… I feel alive…. again

CHORUS

Repeat CHORUS

Outro: Yeah, my country heart lives in Tennessee
Nashville Tennessee…

© 2017 Lyrics by David A Pritchett
© 2017 Music by Jeff Wisnom
Sung by Jeff Wisnom

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