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“WITH YOUR WINGS”

Robert Lloyd

June 03, 2017

Genre: Christian

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A song I wrote and performed as a born-again Christian in 2001. It is the feeling that once life is at its closing end and you've given everything you've got, you are telling the Lord you are ready for judgment and for Him to show you the way to heaven... "With Your wings"... being His wings that He gives you. This was a simple one take guitar-vocal, then I added the background vocals and several years later I added the bass. That is all there is to this song's production. I really wouldn't change a thing.

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Whether or not you are a Christian or a believer in whatever faith, or no faith at all, does this mean anything to you as a person walking this earth.


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Brent Baxter

Hey, Robert!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  I gotta tell ya, as a believer who is looking forward to Heaven… I’m not real comfortable with how this starts- the singer asking God to take his life.  Then it says your time is just about up (old age or sickness? I don’t know).

I guess my question is “who’s gonna relate to this?”  Just folks in hospice?  The chorus is relatable to all believers- we should ALL look forward to Heaven.  And I like the chorus, by the way.

Maybe you could open the song up to a wider audience by taking out the “I’m dying today, Lord take me home” stuff and replace it by something along the lines of “I see so much pain and suffering in the world, and I just want to fly away.”  Then the 2nd verse could make it either talk about your own personal pain or (better yet) talk about what you look forward to in Heaven, how this would can never compare to God’s glory.

I think that’ll open your song up to more listeners.  Just a thought.  Hope it helps.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on someone else’s song.  Thanks!

June 05, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

Thanks Brent… I always wondered what criticism would be for this song. I actually only have one for myself on this and it is also in the first line as I used the word “take” twice. LOL And it has bothered me and I have substituted other words but nothing really I liked as well as what I have. But no one has ever complained.

I will probably keep it in its present form. For me to change the opening would “in my opinion” make the song meaningless. It is what it is… it is about a man at the end of his time on earth (for whatever reason is up to the listener) and he has exhausted himself and given of himself in life and is now ready to go to meet the Lord “if I only had wings” which he hopes the Lord will provide.

Another successful song is of course “My Way”. I would not want to change “And now, the end is near, and so I face the final curtain” as that is what Paul Anka’s song is all about. It immediately put you in a place of understanding. It is one of the greatest song’s of the 20th Century and is also a “it is what it is” type of song.

But I will be thinking in my next song your feelings here… though I don’t like to think too much (I can hear my wife nodding her head in agreement:-) or intellectualize the process too much (my wife says that would be impossible for me to do:-)

Thanks for the feedback.

June 06, 2017

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Corey Bourque

I get it makes you think back on the people that have passed i dont know if thats good or bad but thats what it did to me

i like it

July 13, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

Thanks Corey… I hope I don’t pass too soon, but if I do, “I hope I have wings”. You too. LOL

July 14, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Robert!  Thanks for sharing your song with us.  I gotta tell ya, as a believer who is looking forward to Heaven… I’m not real comfortable with how this starts- the singer asking God to take his life.  Then it says your time is just about up (old age or sickness? I don’t know).

I guess my question is “who’s gonna relate to this?”  Just folks in hospice?  The chorus is relatable to all believers- we should ALL look forward to Heaven.  And I like the chorus, by the way.

Maybe you could open the song up to a wider audience by taking out the “I’m dying today, Lord take me home” stuff and replace it by something along the lines of “I see so much pain and suffering in the world, and I just want to fly away.”  Then the 2nd verse could make it either talk about your own personal pain or (better yet) talk about what you look forward to in Heaven, how this would can never compare to God’s glory.

I think that’ll open your song up to more listeners.  Just a thought.  Hope it helps.  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment on someone else’s song.  Thanks!

June 05, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

Thanks Brent… I always wondered what criticism would be for this song. I actually only have one for myself on this and it is also in the first line as I used the word “take” twice. LOL And it has bothered me and I have substituted other words but nothing really I liked as well as what I have. But no one has ever complained.

I will probably keep it in its present form. For me to change the opening would “in my opinion” make the song meaningless. It is what it is… it is about a man at the end of his time on earth (for whatever reason is up to the listener) and he has exhausted himself and given of himself in life and is now ready to go to meet the Lord “if I only had wings” which he hopes the Lord will provide.

Another successful song is of course “My Way”. I would not want to change “And now, the end is near, and so I face the final curtain” as that is what Paul Anka’s song is all about. It immediately put you in a place of understanding. It is one of the greatest song’s of the 20th Century and is also a “it is what it is” type of song.

But I will be thinking in my next song your feelings here… though I don’t like to think too much (I can hear my wife nodding her head in agreement:-) or intellectualize the process too much (my wife says that would be impossible for me to do:-)

Thanks for the feedback.

June 06, 2017

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Corey Bourque

I get it makes you think back on the people that have passed i dont know if thats good or bad but thats what it did to me

i like it

July 13, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

Thanks Corey… I hope I don’t pass too soon, but if I do, “I hope I have wings”. You too. LOL

July 14, 2017


“WITH YOUR WINGS”

Written by Robert Lloyd

“With Your Wings”
Written by Robert Lloyd (239) 936-9555
E-mail: robertlloydmusic@cs.com

(Verse #1)
G C D
Come take my life Lord, and take my soul…
G C D
It’s just about time and I’m feeling kinda low…
C G+D
I think I’ve done all that I could…
D G C
I begging now if You would Lord…
G D
Give me some wings… and I’m ready to go….

(Chorus)
G
I wanna fly to a better place…
C D
With Your Wings… I’ll go without a trace…
G
To this world I’m gonna say goodbye…
C D
Lord with Your blessing I’ll be able to fly…
G C D G C D
With Your Wings… With Your Wings….

(Verse #2)
G C D
I know it’s my time I can feel it today…
G C D
It’s not for me to worry Lord… I’m coming Your way…
C G+D
I know I’m at the end of my life…
D G C
I’ve struggled through both hunger and strife Lord….
G D
I tried to be strong… now show me the way… (Chorus)

(Verse #3)
G C D
Life’s been tough but I still give thanks…
G C D
You always took the time Lord to hear my complaints…
(*I... never….had….much… but I have no complaints) (*optional line)
C G+D
I feel I’ve done all that I could…
D G C
Everything I thought I should Lord….
G D
If I only had wings… to help me to fly… (Chorus)

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