The song is about the `falseness` of some people and how sometimes it is hard to spot and tries to get the listener to `look underneath` the obvious.
Thanks for the feedback Robert. You are right, this song would be better as a `live` performance. As a matter of fact
I still think that there could be a heavier `raw` guitar riff through the song and have a meeting with a friend who plays lead guitar in a couple of weeks where we can hopefully come to grips with this.
June 03, 2017
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Hi Barry,
I really like the organ plus the guitar at the end makes it come across in a rock anthem style. I feel adding more guitar through the song as you indicated is a great idea.
Since i am a lyricist mainly I’d have enjyed more rhyming also but it has a nice rhythm and style that can get by without changing them. Good Job!
June 06, 2017
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HI David,
Many thanks for your feedback. With your views (and Roberts ) it reinforces my opinion as well so cannot wait to `get to grips`with this song.
Fully understand what you mean about rhyming and it is just my way of trying to be a bit different with words.
Our own Kate Bush is an exponent of this but she is `special`.
June 07, 2017
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FALSE PAPER CLOWNS
THERE`S TRUTH THERE IN A PERSON`S BREATH
AND WARMTH THERE IN THEIR TOUCH THEY TELL ME
A SMILE FOR YOU IN A PERSON`S EYES
BUT CAN YOU SPOT IT OR IS IT TOO MUCH
LOOK, LOOK AT ME
AND I`LL TELL YOU WHAT YOU NEED TO KNOW
LISTEN, LISTEN TO ME
AND I`LL TELL YOU WHAT YOU NEED TO GROW
YOU NEED TO KNOW HOW TO GROW
SO SPOT THAT SMILE IN….. A PERSON`S EYES
IT`LL HAUNT YOU LIKE ME….TILL THE DAY I DIE
THERE`S STYLE THERE IN A PERSON`S WORDS
BUT LIES CAN HIDE UNDERNEATH THEY TELL ME
SEARCH YOUR MIND FOR THE DOUBLE SIGNS
TRY TO KEEP YOUR BELIEFS AND REMEMBER
DON`T BE SWAYED NO DON`T BE SWAYED
BY FALSE PAPER CLOWNS
DON`T BE SWAYED NO DON`T BE SWAYED
BY FALSE PAPER CLOWNS
FALSE PAPER CLOWNS
SO SPOT THAT SMILE IN…..A PERSON`S EYE
IT`LL HAUNT YOU LIKE ME…..TILL I DIE….TILL THE DAY I DIE
I`VE LIVED, I`VE GIVEN ALL OF MY LIFE
I`VE LOOKED, I`VE SEARCHED FOR SOMEONE THE SAME
I TOOK AN ANGEL FOR MY WIFE
BUT NO ONE TOLD ME THAT IT COULD BE A GAME
SO SPOT THAT SMILE…IN A PERSON`S EYE
IT`LL HAUNT YOU, LIKE ME….UNTIL I DIE
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Barry:
I know this was posted previously and I’m glad you posted it again. This seems right our of a Freddie Mercury catalog or any great rock vocalist past, present or future. it would be (to me) more of a live performance song than something I listen to in my home. It pounds as a live show would.
And as usual, you have super productions and your singer was excellent. I might have pushed for more rhyming in the lyrics… but that is merely a personal choice and the song does not suffer for it. You would think SOME ROCK BAND SHOULD GRAB THIS ONE.
Good job!
June 03, 2017
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Thanks for the feedback Robert. You are right, this song would be better as a `live` performance. As a matter of fact
I still think that there could be a heavier `raw` guitar riff through the song and have a meeting with a friend who plays lead guitar in a couple of weeks where we can hopefully come to grips with this.
June 03, 2017
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Hi Barry,
I really like the organ plus the guitar at the end makes it come across in a rock anthem style. I feel adding more guitar through the song as you indicated is a great idea.
Since i am a lyricist mainly I’d have enjyed more rhyming also but it has a nice rhythm and style that can get by without changing them. Good Job!
June 06, 2017
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HI David,
Many thanks for your feedback. With your views (and Roberts ) it reinforces my opinion as well so cannot wait to `get to grips`with this song.
Fully understand what you mean about rhyming and it is just my way of trying to be a bit different with words.
Our own Kate Bush is an exponent of this but she is `special`.
June 07, 2017
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Robert Lloyd
Barry:
I know this was posted previously and I’m glad you posted it again. This seems right our of a Freddie Mercury catalog or any great rock vocalist past, present or future. it would be (to me) more of a live performance song than something I listen to in my home. It pounds as a live show would.
And as usual, you have super productions and your singer was excellent. I might have pushed for more rhyming in the lyrics… but that is merely a personal choice and the song does not suffer for it. You would think SOME ROCK BAND SHOULD GRAB THIS ONE.
Good job!
June 03, 2017
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