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Five-String

Brent Baxter

June 02, 2017

Genre: Country

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I wrote this song with two Canadian country artists, Aaron Goodvin and Drew Gregory. It was actually recorded by ANOTHER Canadian country artist, Tristan Horncastle. This is the demo, with Aaron singing.


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Robert Lloyd

Let me be the first comment…

I like the soundtrack. I feel the vocalist is a bit strained for my ears. A little holding back with a bit smoother and melodic delivery would have been better? But it is still acceptable as a demo. The song is a bit wordy, I will say that. As a singer myself and former performer, this would be a lot to remember. And I don’t know every artist of course, but I do know what its like to sing and remember your set list of songs. Singers (and me) are pretty simple and vain souls. <g>

But this is an upper mid-tempo song that could get with an artist. But it is not a song I would download or purchase in its present form. Now if a George Strait type of vocalist delivered a smoother version of this, I could see it being considered a nicer song.

June 03, 2017

Phillip Lemmonds

I hate to admit it, but I didn’t get what you were doing in the song until the 4th line of the chorus!

Let me explain… I usually read the lyric sheet before listening to a song, just to see if anything jumps out to me.  Being in Tennessee, when someone says “five string”, I automatically think banjo.  So I’m reading the first verse with banjo music going through my head.  It has your usual descriptive lyrics (others take note), but it’s not resonating with me.

I get to the chorus, first line, 5-string…banjo
Second line, three wheel drive.  Well, I’ve seen utility 4WD ATVs that have a tailgate, maybe they call 3-wheel ATVs three wheel drive in Canada.
Third line, a 5-pack, must be a typo, but he said this song got cut.
Fourth line, then it hit me!!!  Felt like an idiot!

If I would have listened to the music while reading the lyrics, I think I would have caught on quicker… except for the five string part.  Maybe they don’t have 5-string banjos in Canada… LOL!

Very creative…

Phillip

 

June 04, 2017

Brian Blevins

hi brent. 

i have not listened yet so these comments on lyrics only. 

i thought the same thing as Phil about the 5-string.  nothing strange or wrong about them cuz I think Banjo when I hear 5-string.

But I did know ahead of time based on the spotlight line “Well, something just feels a little bit wrong… It’s like” that a 6 string with a string missing is what you are talking about.  heck i have played many a string challenged 6 strings.  now playing a 6 string upside down is another thing.  totally not right for sure smile

brian

June 04, 2017

Graham Donahue

I love the song, but I agree the the “Five-String” line is confusing. In the country music market it may be fine, but to a bluegrass artist “five-string” means banjo. Plus, you have the banjo in the recording, which kind of “hints” that it is referring to the banjo.

Cool song though!

June 04, 2017

Graham Donahue

Maybe if you changed the line to “strumming on a 5 string” instead of “picking” that would be less confusing, as well as more fitting since you tend to “pick” the banjo and “strum” the guitar/ Just a thought. I guess it is already recorded now anyway.

June 04, 2017

Richard Kirk

Had the same reaction at first to the banjo.  I’m sure you guys must have thought of that. Many times over the years I’ve gone back and forth about writing a different meaning to what seems to be the obvious interpretation. I don’t know if this is too clever or not. After one gets past the “oh that’s what they mean”  stage it’s very well crafted.  not a real fan of the vocal, but it gets the idea across.

June 08, 2017

Amber Lewis

Brent,

I really like the opening lines and intro, draws me in very quickly, fun catchy. I love the mid-tempo. I don’t think a girl thinks any fight is stupid or dumb, that makes it seem like she is throwing a hissy fit, for no reason, and whether it is dumb, not something girls want to hear, lol, but it meant for a male artist, haha. I can’t say much about your lyrics, but I like the higher energy in the chorus, I didn’t like how it went slow sappy sound when you start to sing “somethings missing,” I know it makes sense with the attitude and lyrics, but my ears want to stay on that more upbeat sound you had going at the beginning chorus. just my two cents, haha, Great song!!

June 16, 2017

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Robert Lloyd

Let me be the first comment…

I like the soundtrack. I feel the vocalist is a bit strained for my ears. A little holding back with a bit smoother and melodic delivery would have been better? But it is still acceptable as a demo. The song is a bit wordy, I will say that. As a singer myself and former performer, this would be a lot to remember. And I don’t know every artist of course, but I do know what its like to sing and remember your set list of songs. Singers (and me) are pretty simple and vain souls. <g>

But this is an upper mid-tempo song that could get with an artist. But it is not a song I would download or purchase in its present form. Now if a George Strait type of vocalist delivered a smoother version of this, I could see it being considered a nicer song.

June 03, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

I hate to admit it, but I didn’t get what you were doing in the song until the 4th line of the chorus!

Let me explain… I usually read the lyric sheet before listening to a song, just to see if anything jumps out to me.  Being in Tennessee, when someone says “five string”, I automatically think banjo.  So I’m reading the first verse with banjo music going through my head.  It has your usual descriptive lyrics (others take note), but it’s not resonating with me.

I get to the chorus, first line, 5-string…banjo
Second line, three wheel drive.  Well, I’ve seen utility 4WD ATVs that have a tailgate, maybe they call 3-wheel ATVs three wheel drive in Canada.
Third line, a 5-pack, must be a typo, but he said this song got cut.
Fourth line, then it hit me!!!  Felt like an idiot!

If I would have listened to the music while reading the lyrics, I think I would have caught on quicker… except for the five string part.  Maybe they don’t have 5-string banjos in Canada… LOL!

Very creative…

Phillip

 

June 04, 2017

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Brian Blevins

hi brent. 

i have not listened yet so these comments on lyrics only. 

i thought the same thing as Phil about the 5-string.  nothing strange or wrong about them cuz I think Banjo when I hear 5-string.

But I did know ahead of time based on the spotlight line “Well, something just feels a little bit wrong… It’s like” that a 6 string with a string missing is what you are talking about.  heck i have played many a string challenged 6 strings.  now playing a 6 string upside down is another thing.  totally not right for sure smile

brian

June 04, 2017

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Graham Donahue

I love the song, but I agree the the “Five-String” line is confusing. In the country music market it may be fine, but to a bluegrass artist “five-string” means banjo. Plus, you have the banjo in the recording, which kind of “hints” that it is referring to the banjo.

Cool song though!

June 04, 2017

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Graham Donahue

Maybe if you changed the line to “strumming on a 5 string” instead of “picking” that would be less confusing, as well as more fitting since you tend to “pick” the banjo and “strum” the guitar/ Just a thought. I guess it is already recorded now anyway.

June 04, 2017

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Richard Kirk

Had the same reaction at first to the banjo.  I’m sure you guys must have thought of that. Many times over the years I’ve gone back and forth about writing a different meaning to what seems to be the obvious interpretation. I don’t know if this is too clever or not. After one gets past the “oh that’s what they mean”  stage it’s very well crafted.  not a real fan of the vocal, but it gets the idea across.

June 08, 2017

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Amber Lewis

Brent,

I really like the opening lines and intro, draws me in very quickly, fun catchy. I love the mid-tempo. I don’t think a girl thinks any fight is stupid or dumb, that makes it seem like she is throwing a hissy fit, for no reason, and whether it is dumb, not something girls want to hear, lol, but it meant for a male artist, haha. I can’t say much about your lyrics, but I like the higher energy in the chorus, I didn’t like how it went slow sappy sound when you start to sing “somethings missing,” I know it makes sense with the attitude and lyrics, but my ears want to stay on that more upbeat sound you had going at the beginning chorus. just my two cents, haha, Great song!!

June 16, 2017


(Brent Baxter, Aaron Goodvin, Drew Gregory)

Sitting up here on 3-Mile Hill
Watching dust flying up behind your Mustang wheels
And doing my best to see the bright side
At least you were too mad to say goodbye
So I’m chillin’ here waiting out the angry
Killing time until you don’t hate me
Watching as you get gone
Well, something just feels a little bit wrong... It’s like

CHORUS:
Picking on a 5-string
On the tailgate of a 3-wheel drive
And sipping on an ice cold 5-pack
While the DJ counts down the top 9
It’s like a one-day weekend
Something’s missing
Baby, when you run
It takes a little fun out of everything
It’s like picking on a 5-string

I know it ain’t like we’re gonna break up
It’s just a stupid fight over something dumb
A couple more hours we gotta get through
Until it’s kissy-kissy and “I’m sorry, too”
So I’m picking daisies ‘cuz I know that love ‘em
But wouldn’t you know I’m one shy of a dozen
Why should I be surprised
When you go away, girl, nothing’s quite right... It’s like

CHORUS: [REPEAT]

I know our making up is coming up around the bend
Oh, and after that, it’s gonna be good again
But until then... I’ll be

CHORUS: [REPEAT]

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