The song is about the strange coincidence of two people meeting each other for the first time and ending up together.
NOW FOR THE LYRICS: I think your lyrics are good just as they are. Could changing them really change the song’s appeal? It’s a challenge and makes me wonder… but I doubt it.
And to really nit-pik, (and I wouldn’t change a thing on the recording as it is done and beautiful as is) is the line in the last verse:
“I can easily see you when we’re growing old”...
For me… I just don’t like words that remind us we’re going to get old and die. Life is upon, but let’s dream in a better and more positive way. Why not, we live but once. I may have suggested had I been a co-writer to substitute a line such with the following or similar:
“Before we found (met) each other, life took a heavy toll.”
As you used “found” in the following line you could use “met” instead. But the song is a wonderful recording as is and I wouldn’t change a thing. You’ve got some cool stuff posted Barry!
May 30, 2017
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Thank you for your great feedback Robert. This is what keeps us songwriters going, isn`t it?
The words `i can easily see you when were growing old` was just a commitment by the vocalist of wanting to spend the rest of his/her life with their `other half but it is invaluable to see how one`s lyrics come across to others.
May 30, 2017
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Many thanks, Giovanni for your feedback and the Brit influence comment.i`m not sure if it is possible to rearrange the order of the songs but I can see where you are going.
August 07, 2017
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FUNNY
SITTING HERE WONDERING JUST HOW I WON THIS PRIZE
MUST BE TRUE LUCK WAS WITH ME
CAN IT BE I`VE FOUND THE ANSWER IN YOUR EYES
THEY`VE HELPED ME TO FINALLY SEE
FUNNY HOW I SEE YOU, THINGS AREN'T WHAT THEY SEEM
EVERY TIME I MEET YOU, THINK I`M IN A DREAM
FUNNY HOW I FOUND YOU, LOOKED AROUND THAT DAY
FUNNY NOW TO TELL YOU, THOUGHT YOU`D RUN AWAY
FUNNY HOW I SEE YOU, IN THE MORNING LIGHT
YOUR HAIR A LITTLE DIFFERENT, TO WHAT IT WAS LAST NIGHT
CAN I TELL YOU SOMETHING, YOU JUST MIGHT LIKE TO HEAR
I KNOW I`LL SHARE YOUR MORNINGS, YEAR AFTER YEAR
(MUSIC......MAIN THEME)
SO THEN WAS IT JUST LUCK WHEN I MET YOU THAT DAY
OR MAYBE WAS IT WHAT SOME WOULD CALL FATE
AND ASK WHAT IF WE`D BOTH GONE IN OPPOSITE WAYS
OR THEN WHAT IF WE WERE BOTH RUNNING LATE
FUNNY HOW YOU SEE ME, AS YOUR OTHER SOUL
I CAN EASILY SEE YOU WHEN WE'RE GROWING OLD
FUNNY HOW I FOUND YOU, LOOKED AROUND THAT DAY
FUNNY NOW TO TELL YOU, THOUGHT YOU`D RUN AWAY
CAN I TELL YOU SOMETHING, YOU MIGHT LIKE TO HEAR
I KNOW I`LL SHARE YOUR MORNINGS, YEAR AFTER YEAR
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Hi Barry… once again you have an excellent recording and the singer just fit this perfect. As I am just listening now and don’t have your lyrics in front of me, I will comment on the music here.
(1) Another soft ballad from you. It is your forte. We get advised of course the mid to up tempo get the cuts, at least in the country and pop field. I personally like ballads and am of the camp of the faster the beat the lower the IQ. Hey, we’re geniuses!
(2) Nice melody with the complex chord structure at least to the ear. Very melancholy and a floating feel to this. it helps that your singer is so ‘that’ in her delivery… beautiful. The harmonies are nice.
(3) The piano is right on. The soundtrack is perfect to the ear and the vocals are upfront where they should be.
Musically, these are my true feelings as we songwriters NEVER want pandering… except from mom. <g>
May 30, 2017
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NOW FOR THE LYRICS: I think your lyrics are good just as they are. Could changing them really change the song’s appeal? It’s a challenge and makes me wonder… but I doubt it.
And to really nit-pik, (and I wouldn’t change a thing on the recording as it is done and beautiful as is) is the line in the last verse:
“I can easily see you when we’re growing old”...
For me… I just don’t like words that remind us we’re going to get old and die. Life is upon, but let’s dream in a better and more positive way. Why not, we live but once. I may have suggested had I been a co-writer to substitute a line such with the following or similar:
“Before we found (met) each other, life took a heavy toll.”
As you used “found” in the following line you could use “met” instead. But the song is a wonderful recording as is and I wouldn’t change a thing. You’ve got some cool stuff posted Barry!
May 30, 2017
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Thank you for your great feedback Robert. This is what keeps us songwriters going, isn`t it?
The words `i can easily see you when were growing old` was just a commitment by the vocalist of wanting to spend the rest of his/her life with their `other half but it is invaluable to see how one`s lyrics come across to others.
May 30, 2017
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Many thanks, Giovanni for your feedback and the Brit influence comment.i`m not sure if it is possible to rearrange the order of the songs but I can see where you are going.
August 07, 2017
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Hi Barry… once again you have an excellent recording and the singer just fit this perfect. As I am just listening now and don’t have your lyrics in front of me, I will comment on the music here.
(1) Another soft ballad from you. It is your forte. We get advised of course the mid to up tempo get the cuts, at least in the country and pop field. I personally like ballads and am of the camp of the faster the beat the lower the IQ. Hey, we’re geniuses!
(2) Nice melody with the complex chord structure at least to the ear. Very melancholy and a floating feel to this. it helps that your singer is so ‘that’ in her delivery… beautiful. The harmonies are nice.
(3) The piano is right on. The soundtrack is perfect to the ear and the vocals are upfront where they should be.
Musically, these are my true feelings as we songwriters NEVER want pandering… except from mom. <g>
May 30, 2017
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