I had popped into a session with Jimmy Borja a talented Nashville writer to record a song we had just written called 7 Billion. At the end of the session - I sat at the keyboard and came up with this chord progression. The words came quickly after that and within about 45 minutes I had this song done.
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It`s a nice song that you sing lovely. I can hear your `inner self` as you sing, well done Mikalyn
May 25, 2017
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Thanks Barry and Jackson - appreciate you taking time to listen and share a few comments. Best regards
MH
May 26, 2017
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Great song. It has a different rhyming pattern than I’m used to, and some fresh rhymes, which makes it new and interesting. Good job!
May 30, 2017
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Love the sound, the feel, the imagery. I think the lyrics are good, but there seems to be a contradiction—is he the poison or the antidote?
June 19, 2017
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Hi Mikalyn!
What I love about this song: the verse melody, 1st verse lyrics, the piano arrangement and the vocals throughout the song. Soooooo good!
What I miss is:
1) some kind of content development in the second verse. We already know he’s gone and that he left her feeling abandoned and confused. The second verse sort of states the same. Maybe elaborate on the good times they had or much he meant to her? Or perhaps give the listener some hint about why he left her?
2) Less ambiguity in the chorus. The concept"antidote”–“poison” is great, but what does “poison” reference to here? The feelings she experience now when he’s gone or something else in her life? It’s a bit hard to tell and makes the chorus less engaging, at least in my view.
Final note: You’re on to something really strong here. The song has a unique ID. With a few tweaks, it’ll be fantastic!
June 26, 2017
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Thanks Martin - I love your suggestions. I guess my only wonder is, that the song is simply about that moment. As a 15 yr old girl I know that my friends and I sometimes just want to languish in that moment. The person is both the poison and the antidote. Thanks for taking the time to comment and offer suggestions. Love them and will think about it a bit more - hope Sweden is treating you well - do you know Max Martin ha ha
June 26, 2017
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I can hear someone like Lorde, or Sara Mclachlan, or even Coldplay,....(.yes,....I said Coldplay) covering this song,....very good Mikalyn!
November 09, 2017
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Those vocals and that piano… gorgeous. The love almost sounds like drugs, it helps you feel safer from the difficulties of life, like an escape and it sounds like losing the love is like going through withdrawals. It was very good then to end it on a hopeful note. It definitely is good to demonstrate resilience to the listener.
July 17, 2018
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Antidote
Mikalyn Hay, Jimmy Borja,
Verse 1:
Why
Why did you turn
and leave me here high and
Dry
Has this all just
been a beautiful
Lie
You promised me that
you'd never leave me
behind, behind
Chorus:
You're my antidote
Save me from all the poison
Why'd you have to go
Please just give me a reason
You're my antidote
Save me from all the poison
When I need you most
Why'd you have to go
Verse:
Who
Who do you think
you are to leave me like
this
Trapped in the holds
of your venomous
kiss
and now I can't seem
to get the taste
off my lips
Chorus
Bridge:
Healing me would have been easy for you
but you just walked away
now I'm finding ways to live without you
Cause love always has
a price to pay
Chorus
Outro:
Time
Time always heals
the wounds of those who've left
Crying
You were my cure
but now Im here and Im
fine
I'll be
Fine
I'll be fine
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It’s a beautiful song, and a great demo.
Not familiar with the strictly pop environment, but thinking a good cut for Lady Antebellum, who seem to operate seamlessly in the country pop area.
May 24, 2017
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It`s a nice song that you sing lovely. I can hear your `inner self` as you sing, well done Mikalyn
May 25, 2017
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Thanks Barry and Jackson - appreciate you taking time to listen and share a few comments. Best regards
MH
May 26, 2017
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Great song. It has a different rhyming pattern than I’m used to, and some fresh rhymes, which makes it new and interesting. Good job!
May 30, 2017
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Love the sound, the feel, the imagery. I think the lyrics are good, but there seems to be a contradiction—is he the poison or the antidote?
June 19, 2017
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Hi Mikalyn!
What I love about this song: the verse melody, 1st verse lyrics, the piano arrangement and the vocals throughout the song. Soooooo good!
What I miss is:
1) some kind of content development in the second verse. We already know he’s gone and that he left her feeling abandoned and confused. The second verse sort of states the same. Maybe elaborate on the good times they had or much he meant to her? Or perhaps give the listener some hint about why he left her?
2) Less ambiguity in the chorus. The concept"antidote”–“poison” is great, but what does “poison” reference to here? The feelings she experience now when he’s gone or something else in her life? It’s a bit hard to tell and makes the chorus less engaging, at least in my view.
Final note: You’re on to something really strong here. The song has a unique ID. With a few tweaks, it’ll be fantastic!
June 26, 2017
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Thanks Martin - I love your suggestions. I guess my only wonder is, that the song is simply about that moment. As a 15 yr old girl I know that my friends and I sometimes just want to languish in that moment. The person is both the poison and the antidote. Thanks for taking the time to comment and offer suggestions. Love them and will think about it a bit more - hope Sweden is treating you well - do you know Max Martin ha ha
June 26, 2017
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I can hear someone like Lorde, or Sara Mclachlan, or even Coldplay,....(.yes,....I said Coldplay) covering this song,....very good Mikalyn!
November 09, 2017
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Those vocals and that piano… gorgeous. The love almost sounds like drugs, it helps you feel safer from the difficulties of life, like an escape and it sounds like losing the love is like going through withdrawals. It was very good then to end it on a hopeful note. It definitely is good to demonstrate resilience to the listener.
July 17, 2018
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Jackson Lucas
It’s a beautiful song, and a great demo.
Not familiar with the strictly pop environment, but thinking a good cut for Lady Antebellum, who seem to operate seamlessly in the country pop area.
May 24, 2017
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