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Antidote

Mikalyn Hay

May 24, 2017

Genre: Pop

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I had popped into a session with Jimmy Borja a talented Nashville writer to record a song we had just written called 7 Billion. At the end of the session - I sat at the keyboard and came up with this chord progression. The words came quickly after that and within about 45 minutes I had this song done.

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Jackson Lucas

It’s a beautiful song, and a great demo.

Not familiar with the strictly pop environment, but thinking a good cut for Lady Antebellum, who seem to operate seamlessly in the country pop area.

May 24, 2017

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barry guy

It`s a nice song that you sing lovely. I can hear your `inner self` as you sing, well done Mikalyn

May 25, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Thanks Barry and Jackson - appreciate you taking time to listen and share a few comments.  Best regards
MH

May 26, 2017

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Graham Donahue

Great song. It has a different rhyming pattern than I’m used to, and some fresh rhymes, which makes it new and interesting. Good job!

May 30, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Love the sound, the feel, the imagery. I think the lyrics are good, but there seems to be a contradiction—is he the poison or the antidote?

June 19, 2017

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Martin Lorentzson

Hi Mikalyn!

What I love about this song: the verse melody, 1st verse lyrics, the piano arrangement and the vocals throughout the song. Soooooo good!

What I miss is:
1) some kind of content development in the second verse. We already know he’s gone and that he left her feeling abandoned and confused. The second verse sort of states the same. Maybe elaborate on the good times they had or much he meant to her? Or perhaps give the listener some hint about why he left her? 

2) Less ambiguity in the chorus. The concept"antidote”–“poison” is great, but what does “poison” reference to here? The feelings she experience now when he’s gone or something else in her life? It’s a bit hard to tell and makes the chorus less engaging, at least in my view.

Final note: You’re on to something really strong here. The song has a unique ID. With a few tweaks, it’ll be fantastic!

June 26, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Thanks Martin - I love your suggestions.  I guess my only wonder is, that the song is simply about that moment.  As a 15 yr old girl I know that my friends and I sometimes just want to languish in that moment.  The person is both the poison and the antidote.  Thanks for taking the time to comment and offer suggestions.  Love them and will think about it a bit more smile - hope Sweden is treating you well - do you know Max Martin ha ha smile

June 26, 2017

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Roy Ashdown

I can hear someone like Lorde, or Sara Mclachlan, or even Coldplay,....(.yes,....I said Coldplay) covering this song,....very good Mikalyn!

November 09, 2017

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Jackson Lucas

It’s a beautiful song, and a great demo.

Not familiar with the strictly pop environment, but thinking a good cut for Lady Antebellum, who seem to operate seamlessly in the country pop area.

May 24, 2017

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barry guy

It`s a nice song that you sing lovely. I can hear your `inner self` as you sing, well done Mikalyn

May 25, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Thanks Barry and Jackson - appreciate you taking time to listen and share a few comments.  Best regards
MH

May 26, 2017

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Graham Donahue

Great song. It has a different rhyming pattern than I’m used to, and some fresh rhymes, which makes it new and interesting. Good job!

May 30, 2017

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Michael R. J. Roth

Love the sound, the feel, the imagery. I think the lyrics are good, but there seems to be a contradiction—is he the poison or the antidote?

June 19, 2017

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Martin Lorentzson

Hi Mikalyn!

What I love about this song: the verse melody, 1st verse lyrics, the piano arrangement and the vocals throughout the song. Soooooo good!

What I miss is:
1) some kind of content development in the second verse. We already know he’s gone and that he left her feeling abandoned and confused. The second verse sort of states the same. Maybe elaborate on the good times they had or much he meant to her? Or perhaps give the listener some hint about why he left her? 

2) Less ambiguity in the chorus. The concept"antidote”–“poison” is great, but what does “poison” reference to here? The feelings she experience now when he’s gone or something else in her life? It’s a bit hard to tell and makes the chorus less engaging, at least in my view.

Final note: You’re on to something really strong here. The song has a unique ID. With a few tweaks, it’ll be fantastic!

June 26, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Thanks Martin - I love your suggestions.  I guess my only wonder is, that the song is simply about that moment.  As a 15 yr old girl I know that my friends and I sometimes just want to languish in that moment.  The person is both the poison and the antidote.  Thanks for taking the time to comment and offer suggestions.  Love them and will think about it a bit more smile - hope Sweden is treating you well - do you know Max Martin ha ha smile

June 26, 2017

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Roy Ashdown

I can hear someone like Lorde, or Sara Mclachlan, or even Coldplay,....(.yes,....I said Coldplay) covering this song,....very good Mikalyn!

November 09, 2017


Antidote
Mikalyn Hay, Jimmy Borja,

Verse 1:
Why
Why did you turn
and leave me here high and
Dry
Has this all just
been a beautiful
Lie
You promised me that
you'd never leave me
behind, behind


Chorus:
You're my antidote
Save me from all the poison
Why'd you have to go
Please just give me a reason
You're my antidote
Save me from all the poison
When I need you most
Why'd you have to go

Verse:
Who
Who do you think
you are to leave me like
this
Trapped in the holds
of your venomous
kiss
and now I can't seem
to get the taste
off my lips

Chorus

Bridge:
Healing me would have been easy for you
but you just walked away
now I'm finding ways to live without you
Cause love always has
a price to pay

Chorus

Outro:
Time
Time always heals
the wounds of those who've left
Crying
You were my cure
but now Im here and Im
fine
I'll be
Fine
I'll be fine

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