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Didn't really know what to put under genre. It's in acoustic stages right now, but I'd love for it to turn to a rock song. It's about feeling like you're at a lull in life, that you're wasting time and that it's moving by too quickly.
Would love general structure help. It's unfinished and at it's 1 min mark which is where I should pull a chorus in. Constructive criticism and help with the direction would be amazing. Thanks all.
Thank you so much, Ronnie. I think I get so caught up on trying to come up with a good chorus, that I block myself from the rest of the song. Your words helped me to write a second verse. Thanks for the help!!!
May 23, 2017
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Spinning, I’m spinning
Just like this room
Has been spinning for the past day or two
Dreaming, I'm dreaming
Of making it through
Oh, the hours, move like minutes
Just watching the tube
Oh, if I could see
Something new
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Wow Joy, I think you’re off to a great start!! I’m surprised by how much talent you have that you would be stumped on what to do?
Yes, that minute mark is important. Ideally you’d want to hit the chorus before that time slot. I wouldn’t worry about that right now. Getting your lyrics out in the open and into your song should come next. You have a nice melody and feel going here.
What’s this song about?
Write down some keywords, work on your hook, write another verse and so on an so on. After all that you should have enough material to write your song. I like the title “Something New” and I know we all need something new every now and then.
Thanks for sharing, happy songwriting ♫♪ ♪
May 23, 2017
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Thank you so much, Ronnie. I think I get so caught up on trying to come up with a good chorus, that I block myself from the rest of the song. Your words helped me to write a second verse. Thanks for the help!!!
May 23, 2017
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Ronnie Glenn
Wow Joy, I think you’re off to a great start!! I’m surprised by how much talent you have that you would be stumped on what to do?
Yes, that minute mark is important. Ideally you’d want to hit the chorus before that time slot. I wouldn’t worry about that right now. Getting your lyrics out in the open and into your song should come next. You have a nice melody and feel going here.
What’s this song about?
Write down some keywords, work on your hook, write another verse and so on an so on. After all that you should have enough material to write your song. I like the title “Something New” and I know we all need something new every now and then.
Thanks for sharing, happy songwriting ♫♪ ♪
May 23, 2017