They're different, but it's a good thing
Any feedback is great.
Thanks Brad & Jeffrey!
Brad, the singer was Jessica Mack - she’s super-talented.
May 18, 2017
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Hi Dave.
Great tune man. Well done.
To me the 2nd line of V1/2 do not feel right in the flow. It could be the way the singer did it
It feels like the word ‘frogs’ is sort of hanging out there and not quite in place. in V2, it feels like the end of line one and line 2 are a different rhythm than V1. seems to stall for just a sec when she says ‘about.’
Other than that it is a cool song.
Thanks
Brian
May 18, 2017
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Dave… this one is ready to pitch. I wouldn’t change a thing.
The story line is awesome with the opposite attraction thing. The soundtrack is great and the vocalist is what you hear on the radio. Now I am a guy and I wouldn’t buy this type of song but I would imagine girls would. Very very cool. You are a writer. If I had a label I would release this one to radio.
May 29, 2017
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Thanks Robert! I’m starting to get a lot of publisher interest in this one, so hopefully it gets out there….
May 30, 2017
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Like it Dave…..very current and relevant….interesting phrasing and cool
use of the title…...
July 08, 2017
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Your favorite Saturday night is
Drinking some beers and giggin some frogs
Mine’s goin out dancing with my
Body-huggin’ little black dress on
Everybody says, you and me, don’t stand a chance
But we’re a great example, how opposites attract
I can see us
Chorus
Workin, workin
Doin it hand in hand
I can see us
Workin, workin
Settin up a lifetime plan
I can see us bein a team
Who’s better than you and me
Like, seriously (spoken)
I can see us
Workin, workin,…..
Workin, Workin …baby
I know a thing or two about
When things don’t feel right
Had my share of momma’s boys
And the ones who wanna talk about themselves all night
Even though you and me, we got different views
When you put us together, we make a perfect groove….I can see us (Chorus)
Bridge
There’s a force of nature goin on between us
That’s why I gotta say, I can see us, ……I can see us
2
This is pretty awesome as-is IMO Dave, like seriously! (See what I did there?) Everything flowed, was very conversational, and nothing took me out of the song. Loved the singer too…perfect character! Great song!!
May 17, 2017
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Thanks Brad & Jeffrey!
Brad, the singer was Jessica Mack - she’s super-talented.
May 18, 2017
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Hi Dave.
Great tune man. Well done.
To me the 2nd line of V1/2 do not feel right in the flow. It could be the way the singer did it
It feels like the word ‘frogs’ is sort of hanging out there and not quite in place. in V2, it feels like the end of line one and line 2 are a different rhythm than V1. seems to stall for just a sec when she says ‘about.’
Other than that it is a cool song.
Thanks
Brian
May 18, 2017
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Dave… this one is ready to pitch. I wouldn’t change a thing.
The story line is awesome with the opposite attraction thing. The soundtrack is great and the vocalist is what you hear on the radio. Now I am a guy and I wouldn’t buy this type of song but I would imagine girls would. Very very cool. You are a writer. If I had a label I would release this one to radio.
May 29, 2017
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Thanks Robert! I’m starting to get a lot of publisher interest in this one, so hopefully it gets out there….
May 30, 2017
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Like it Dave…..very current and relevant….interesting phrasing and cool
use of the title…...
July 08, 2017
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This is pretty awesome as-is IMO Dave, like seriously! (See what I did there?) Everything flowed, was very conversational, and nothing took me out of the song. Loved the singer too…perfect character! Great song!!
May 17, 2017