My first time top lining (writing to a loop/beat). I wrote this with my friend Sean Gasaway after I had wrote a loop in Logic along with my acoustic. The title sort of jumped out of it.
Thanks Brent! I couldn’t find them in my word docs but I’ll post them in a few. I agree with you totally on the chorus…needs two repetitive sections before the woulda coulda shoulda part. I’ll hash it all out with Sean soon. Thanks for taking a listen and sharing your thoughts with me!
May 03, 2017
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While the song has an edgy, laid-back sound, I was lost. I don’t get the whole hearse/Cadillac theme, as most hearses are Cadillacs! Maybe something along the lines of “We were riding in the wrong Cadillac, we took the hearse instead of the convertible”.
Keep writing!
Phillip
May 06, 2017
I really like the parts of the song - I would also like to see the lyrics so I could see where it is you want me to go in the story. I think its a cool track.
May 09, 2017
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Hey James - this is a cool song! I like the feel a lot and totally dig the hearse/Cadillac idea. I feel like I’d want the chorus to lift a little more. It has a really cool, slow build kinda feel to it but for me it never builds all the way. I would almost keep the chorus you have the first time around but then somehow take it up a little more (or maybe just build the production a little more) the second time through.
Either way, good song. Keep it up!
May 09, 2017
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Hey, James! Thanks for posting! I dig the overall vibe of the song. Wish you’d posted the lyrics so I could dig into them more. I like the “we were riding in a hearse when it should’ve been a cadillac.” Love that. I’d like to hear that first part of the chorus (up to and including the woah-woahs) repeated before you get to the back end of the chorus. Something about the 2nd verse doesn’t kill me. Some more melodic variation or lift? Or getting into the chorus on some sort of different vehicle than a hearse? I’m not sure, but something was missing.
Overall, I like it. Please pay this forward by leaving a comment or review on someone else’s song!
May 03, 2017
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Thanks Brent! I couldn’t find them in my word docs but I’ll post them in a few. I agree with you totally on the chorus…needs two repetitive sections before the woulda coulda shoulda part. I’ll hash it all out with Sean soon. Thanks for taking a listen and sharing your thoughts with me!
May 03, 2017
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While the song has an edgy, laid-back sound, I was lost. I don’t get the whole hearse/Cadillac theme, as most hearses are Cadillacs! Maybe something along the lines of “We were riding in the wrong Cadillac, we took the hearse instead of the convertible”.
Keep writing!
Phillip
May 06, 2017
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I really like the parts of the song - I would also like to see the lyrics so I could see where it is you want me to go in the story. I think its a cool track.
May 09, 2017
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Hey James - this is a cool song! I like the feel a lot and totally dig the hearse/Cadillac idea. I feel like I’d want the chorus to lift a little more. It has a really cool, slow build kinda feel to it but for me it never builds all the way. I would almost keep the chorus you have the first time around but then somehow take it up a little more (or maybe just build the production a little more) the second time through.
Either way, good song. Keep it up!
May 09, 2017
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Brent Baxter
Hey, James! Thanks for posting! I dig the overall vibe of the song. Wish you’d posted the lyrics so I could dig into them more. I like the “we were riding in a hearse when it should’ve been a cadillac.” Love that. I’d like to hear that first part of the chorus (up to and including the woah-woahs) repeated before you get to the back end of the chorus. Something about the 2nd verse doesn’t kill me. Some more melodic variation or lift? Or getting into the chorus on some sort of different vehicle than a hearse? I’m not sure, but something was missing.
Overall, I like it. Please pay this forward by leaving a comment or review on someone else’s song!
May 03, 2017