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I Can’t Wait to See You Again © 2017

David Pritchett

April 26, 2017

Genre: Country

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This is a WORK in PROGRESS - A breakup story where refusing to accept it and drinking create an unusual trip.

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Phillip Lemmonds

On first listen, without delving too deeply into the song, I’d suggest a title change to simply “I Can’t Wait”.  The current title gives away what the song is about and I’ve always heard that’s not good when trying to get an artist or publisher to listen to your song.  You’re trying to peek their curiosity so they’ll at least give it a listen.

Will try a deeper review later, and thanks for posting your baby.

Phillip

April 26, 2017

Benny Pitsinger

Good song structure and melody but the meanings are not clear to me. One headlight sounds like a motorcycle but pushing on the gas sounds like a car. Did she leave you and if so why is she going to be there? I find the ABAC rhyme scheme to be hard to follow and much prefer ABAB or ABCB so that when you get to the end of a verse you feel like it is finished. Good effort man! Keep writing!

April 27, 2017

Amber Lewis

loving the acoustic!

April 27, 2017

Brent Baxter

Hey, David!  Thanks for sharing your work with us.  I like that it’s (excuse the pun) a driving feel.  Heartache with a beat is a good thing.

As far a cut/ability, I thinking having the singer drinking and driving is a pretty big no-no.  Sounds like the guy has a death wish.  Which brings me to a thought.  Since the drinking and driving thing makes it a hard pitch, what if you go really dark and acknowledge that he has a death wish.  She died in a wreck the night she left (might’ve been the tears in your eyes that made you miss that turn, etc.).  Now you’re drinking and driving, figuring you’ll kill yourself, but that’s okay.  ‘Cuz you can’t wait to see her again.

Okay.  That’s REALLY not commercial.  But it might be cool.  Just a thought.

And I like that you changed the “her” to “you.”  Much more personal.

Please pay this forward by leaving a comment or review on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

April 28, 2017

David Pritchett

Philip - Thank you for your comments and the title thanks for the idea. smile

Benny - Thanks for your comments - it is a car with only one headlight and that is why he is daring fate driving it.  The whole song is about him wanting things to be different and he does not want to accept the truth that she left so he is believing in his mind that she will be there when he arrives.  I used the rhyme scheme on this one because I usually write ABAB or ABABCC.  I was trying something different. I do not like to do the same thing but enjoy change because I learn. smile

Amber - Glad you like the music

Brent - Thank you for your comments - I do understand the drinking/driving no no but was going for something unique.  I actually had the Deathwish idea in mind when I wrote it.  I thought that might be even worse than drinking as it might encourage suicide so I changed it. LOL Now I am going to re-consider and do a re-write with neither of those ideas and see what might work better.

May 01, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

On first listen, without delving too deeply into the song, I’d suggest a title change to simply “I Can’t Wait”.  The current title gives away what the song is about and I’ve always heard that’s not good when trying to get an artist or publisher to listen to your song.  You’re trying to peek their curiosity so they’ll at least give it a listen.

Will try a deeper review later, and thanks for posting your baby.

Phillip

April 26, 2017

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Benny Pitsinger

Good song structure and melody but the meanings are not clear to me. One headlight sounds like a motorcycle but pushing on the gas sounds like a car. Did she leave you and if so why is she going to be there? I find the ABAC rhyme scheme to be hard to follow and much prefer ABAB or ABCB so that when you get to the end of a verse you feel like it is finished. Good effort man! Keep writing!

April 27, 2017

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Amber Lewis

loving the acoustic!

April 27, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, David!  Thanks for sharing your work with us.  I like that it’s (excuse the pun) a driving feel.  Heartache with a beat is a good thing.

As far a cut/ability, I thinking having the singer drinking and driving is a pretty big no-no.  Sounds like the guy has a death wish.  Which brings me to a thought.  Since the drinking and driving thing makes it a hard pitch, what if you go really dark and acknowledge that he has a death wish.  She died in a wreck the night she left (might’ve been the tears in your eyes that made you miss that turn, etc.).  Now you’re drinking and driving, figuring you’ll kill yourself, but that’s okay.  ‘Cuz you can’t wait to see her again.

Okay.  That’s REALLY not commercial.  But it might be cool.  Just a thought.

And I like that you changed the “her” to “you.”  Much more personal.

Please pay this forward by leaving a comment or review on another writer’s song.  Thanks!

April 28, 2017

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David Pritchett

Philip - Thank you for your comments and the title thanks for the idea. smile

Benny - Thanks for your comments - it is a car with only one headlight and that is why he is daring fate driving it.  The whole song is about him wanting things to be different and he does not want to accept the truth that she left so he is believing in his mind that she will be there when he arrives.  I used the rhyme scheme on this one because I usually write ABAB or ABABCC.  I was trying something different. I do not like to do the same thing but enjoy change because I learn. smile

Amber - Glad you like the music

Brent - Thank you for your comments - I do understand the drinking/driving no no but was going for something unique.  I actually had the Deathwish idea in mind when I wrote it.  I thought that might be even worse than drinking as it might encourage suicide so I changed it. LOL Now I am going to re-consider and do a re-write with neither of those ideas and see what might work better.

May 01, 2017


I Can’t Wait to...

Written by David Pritchett

( a few word changes have been made below since the recording)


V1
One headlight daring fate on a cold moonless night
Whiskeys drivin’ helping my heartache disappear
Old thoughts of you in my head hiding out of sight
Memory frozen on the last things you said

“I’m leaving,” I hear again pushing harder on the gas
Pretending it never happened, I know you’ll be there
Two dim tail lights appear; I swerve into the past
Happier times fix my heart for a moment it’s alright

CHORUS
In my mind I can’t let anything change
If I lose myself will I find you again?
Drivin’ faster… I can’t wait… to see her again…
I can’t wait… can’t wait… to see her again

V2
With every drink I leave reality behind
Whiskey’s a magician playing tricks on my fear
Traveling in my mind speeding to transcend time
Trying to arrive before I miss you… leaving me

CHORUS

BRIDGE
Losing myself in illusions – reality I can’t find
Drinking my sanity from a bottle – lost in time…….

CHORUS

Outro: I can’t wait… can’t wait …to see her again…


© 2017 Lyrics By David A. Pritchett / Music by Jeff Wisnom (Singer)

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