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Walk in the Rain

Katie Fee

April 17, 2017

Genre: Country

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Based on a quote I found on pinterest that said, "Maybe I can't stop the downpour, but I will always join you for a walk in the rain."

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Sean Kasey

I really like the melody in the chorus.  It’s catchy, works well with the verses and makes good use of the simple chord structure.  The second to last line in the chorus felt like it had too many syllables on first listen but I liked it a little more the second time.

I would consider changing up the bridge melody a little more (either the notes or the rhythm) to make it a little more distinct from the rest of the song.

Just my 2 cents worth though.  Overall, I like it.

-Sean

April 19, 2017

Katie Fee

Hey Sean,

Thanks for taking a listen and taking the time to write some feedback! I really appreciate it.

~Katie

April 19, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Katie!  I’d echo what Sean said about your chorus.  Like it, but too wordy at the end.  As for the verses, I’m having to do a little too much work- I don’t know what the struggle is.  Therefore, I’m up in my head a lot - trying to fill in the gaps.  I’d either paint the struggle more specifically or the person’s reaction to it.

Not sure exactly what’s “off,” but I get the feeling either you were making up the struggle and you’re not really sure what it is- or you were purposefully avoiding telling us what the struggle is in an effort to make the song “universal.”  The universal is in the specific, though.

There’s a lot I like about the song- I like the chorus, I like that it’s a positive song- about loving someone through a hard time.  And I like that it has some tempo- it’s not a slow ballad.

Nice work!  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment or feedback on someone else’s song!

April 21, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

I’ll add your overuse of the word “just”, which is used several times in the song.  I know songwriting doesn’t follow the strict rules of proper English, like ending a line with a preposition, but I had an English teacher that would give an automatic “F” if we used the word “just” in a paper.  Today, they jump out at me like a pouncing tiger.

I think as songwriters we use words like “just”, “that”, and other short words as fillers to keep the syllables and meter right.  If you look at the lines, it doesn’t change the meaning if we omit such words.

As for the bridge, try using minor or 7th chords to give it a slightly different vibe.

Keep writing!

Phillip

April 21, 2017

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Sean Kasey

I really like the melody in the chorus.  It’s catchy, works well with the verses and makes good use of the simple chord structure.  The second to last line in the chorus felt like it had too many syllables on first listen but I liked it a little more the second time.

I would consider changing up the bridge melody a little more (either the notes or the rhythm) to make it a little more distinct from the rest of the song.

Just my 2 cents worth though.  Overall, I like it.

-Sean

April 19, 2017

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Katie Fee

Hey Sean,

Thanks for taking a listen and taking the time to write some feedback! I really appreciate it.

~Katie

April 19, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Katie!  I’d echo what Sean said about your chorus.  Like it, but too wordy at the end.  As for the verses, I’m having to do a little too much work- I don’t know what the struggle is.  Therefore, I’m up in my head a lot - trying to fill in the gaps.  I’d either paint the struggle more specifically or the person’s reaction to it.

Not sure exactly what’s “off,” but I get the feeling either you were making up the struggle and you’re not really sure what it is- or you were purposefully avoiding telling us what the struggle is in an effort to make the song “universal.”  The universal is in the specific, though.

There’s a lot I like about the song- I like the chorus, I like that it’s a positive song- about loving someone through a hard time.  And I like that it has some tempo- it’s not a slow ballad.

Nice work!  Please pay it forward by leaving a comment or feedback on someone else’s song!

April 21, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

I’ll add your overuse of the word “just”, which is used several times in the song.  I know songwriting doesn’t follow the strict rules of proper English, like ending a line with a preposition, but I had an English teacher that would give an automatic “F” if we used the word “just” in a paper.  Today, they jump out at me like a pouncing tiger.

I think as songwriters we use words like “just”, “that”, and other short words as fillers to keep the syllables and meter right.  If you look at the lines, it doesn’t change the meaning if we omit such words.

As for the bridge, try using minor or 7th chords to give it a slightly different vibe.

Keep writing!

Phillip

April 21, 2017


Walk in the Rain

Written by Katie Fee

VERSE
You're laying there, staring at the drywall
Wonderin' how it went so wrong
Don't know what to do, how you're gonna get through
'Cause you don't think you'll last long

PRECHORUS
What started as a single drop is now a full on downpour
It's comin' down hard
It's testing your strength
But trust me you'll survive the storm

CHORUS
So let it all pour down
There's no one else around no need to hide the pain
The storm keeps raging on
But soon it will be gone
Until the clouds break I will walk with you in the rain
Walk in the rain

mmm

VERSE
You stumble to your feet
But you slip on the wet ground and fall back down
But it just takes time
For the brighter days to come back around

PRECHORUS
When the clouds cover up the sun again
And you're on the verge of giving up soon
Just have a little patience
You'll be alright
'Cause it's the water that makes the flowers bloom

CHORUS

BRIDGE
And I may not be able to
Make it go away
But just know I'll be with you
Every step of the way

CHORUS

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