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Fade Away

Mikalyn Hay

March 30, 2017

Genre: Country

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This song came about when Roger Beckett who is a country writer came over for a visit. I am more indie pop but, I had this ballad written on keys. Roger suggested the major lift for the chorus and we changed up the melody and an hour or two later we had Fade Away. I recorded the song down in Nashville at Steve Peffer's home studio. Its a song about something that happens to so many relationships when they inevitably fade away - even though the song lyric is sad- I tried to keep the vocal kind of accepting. Fade Away is not always a bad thing.

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Does the upbeat track contradict the lyrics and if you feel it does - does that bother you at all when listening?


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Brent Baxter

Thanks for sharing! It’s cool to hear you on a country song. Chorus is definitely my favorite part of the song. I dig the melody there. You always do cool melodic stuff, and it’s good to see that coming through here.

Country music is often “heartache with a beat,” so it doesn’t other me that the lyric is sad but the melody is happy.

I thing the biggest opportunity to strengthen this song is in the lyric. It’s not as cool and “out there” as some of your pop stuff, but it’s not as clear and visual as top country songs tend to be. So if say go one way or the other. This middle ground isn’t as compelling as it could be.  And it’s just lacking some clarity in the lyric. Give me something I can see in my head when I hear the song. Give me a better sense of what’s going on.

You’ve kinda spoiled me with your other songs- you’ve set your own bar pretty high. But the upside is that I know you can reach it!

Hope that helps. If it does, pay it forward by commenting on someone else’s song. Thanks!

March 30, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Thank you Brent for taking the time to listen and offer suggestions. I totally agree with you.  As a young writer, I know when I am taking shortcuts and taking the easy lryic choice, and not taking the story where it could go.  In pop you can sing about an idea or feeling but Country is all about that story and the imagery!!  I will work on that for my next Country song.  Thank you again!

March 31, 2017

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Dave Quirk

Hi Mikalyn!  LOVE the climb for the pre-chorus on this…as i listened i was thinking this might sound cooler produced as a pop song vs country, then i saw Brent’s comments, and maybe he was thinking similar thoughts.  I say that because it has such a good feel to it…Maybe change that Bridge up with a different beat, less instruments, something like that?  And your voice…..WOW!  Your voice stands out immediately on every song you do…soon I’ll be saying “I listened to her songs back before all you guys were buying her concert tickets and watching her at awards shows!!”

April 03, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

HI Dave - first off, thanks for the feedback and the kind words.  Its funny because it was never my intention to write a country song with the track.  It was turned kind of country because my dad wanted to see what would happen if I took the basic track recorded with guitar and vocals and sent it to some guys in Nashville to do their thing with.  We also wanted to experiment with mixing the track afterwards.  I did the vocals when i was down there last month.  I like your suggestion of creating a pop vibe to it and just might do that.  Thanks again smile

April 03, 2017

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Sean Kasey

Hey Mikalyn,

I totally dig this tune and was tapping my feet along with it immediately!  The lyric/track contradiction didn’t bother me at all.  Like Brent said “heartache with a beat”.  There are plenty of examples in both country and pop I think where the groove and production may seem a little “happier” than the lyric actually is.  For a lot of songwriters (myself certainly included) we find more inspiration in the “sadder” parts of life but not every song can be a ballad in a minor key.  Anyway, good job!

-Sean

April 19, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Thanks for sharing! It’s cool to hear you on a country song. Chorus is definitely my favorite part of the song. I dig the melody there. You always do cool melodic stuff, and it’s good to see that coming through here.

Country music is often “heartache with a beat,” so it doesn’t other me that the lyric is sad but the melody is happy.

I thing the biggest opportunity to strengthen this song is in the lyric. It’s not as cool and “out there” as some of your pop stuff, but it’s not as clear and visual as top country songs tend to be. So if say go one way or the other. This middle ground isn’t as compelling as it could be.  And it’s just lacking some clarity in the lyric. Give me something I can see in my head when I hear the song. Give me a better sense of what’s going on.

You’ve kinda spoiled me with your other songs- you’ve set your own bar pretty high. But the upside is that I know you can reach it!

Hope that helps. If it does, pay it forward by commenting on someone else’s song. Thanks!

March 30, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

Thank you Brent for taking the time to listen and offer suggestions. I totally agree with you.  As a young writer, I know when I am taking shortcuts and taking the easy lryic choice, and not taking the story where it could go.  In pop you can sing about an idea or feeling but Country is all about that story and the imagery!!  I will work on that for my next Country song.  Thank you again!

March 31, 2017

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Dave Quirk

Hi Mikalyn!  LOVE the climb for the pre-chorus on this…as i listened i was thinking this might sound cooler produced as a pop song vs country, then i saw Brent’s comments, and maybe he was thinking similar thoughts.  I say that because it has such a good feel to it…Maybe change that Bridge up with a different beat, less instruments, something like that?  And your voice…..WOW!  Your voice stands out immediately on every song you do…soon I’ll be saying “I listened to her songs back before all you guys were buying her concert tickets and watching her at awards shows!!”

April 03, 2017

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Mikalyn Hay

HI Dave - first off, thanks for the feedback and the kind words.  Its funny because it was never my intention to write a country song with the track.  It was turned kind of country because my dad wanted to see what would happen if I took the basic track recorded with guitar and vocals and sent it to some guys in Nashville to do their thing with.  We also wanted to experiment with mixing the track afterwards.  I did the vocals when i was down there last month.  I like your suggestion of creating a pop vibe to it and just might do that.  Thanks again smile

April 03, 2017

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Sean Kasey

Hey Mikalyn,

I totally dig this tune and was tapping my feet along with it immediately!  The lyric/track contradiction didn’t bother me at all.  Like Brent said “heartache with a beat”.  There are plenty of examples in both country and pop I think where the groove and production may seem a little “happier” than the lyric actually is.  For a lot of songwriters (myself certainly included) we find more inspiration in the “sadder” parts of life but not every song can be a ballad in a minor key.  Anyway, good job!

-Sean

April 19, 2017


Verse 1: (Dm, Am)
Saying every things the same
but I can tell that somethings changed
I know you enough I know you
Saying everything is fine
but I can see it in your eyes
Can you let me know
where you want to go

Pre: (A7)
I dont want to play these games
Chorus: (F, Am7, Dm7, Bb)
And I would be lying if I say it doesnt hurt cause it does
watch our love fade to dust
little things that you do, little things that you say
fade away, fade away, fade

Verse 2:
I dont want to waste my time
worrrying about you and I
when we are the last thing on your mind



Chorus

Bridge:
Ooh, fade, ooh, fade
moments to memories
dust is settling
moments to memories words on a page
words disappearing

Chorus: F, Am7, Dm7, Bb, C

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