Moving on after a failed and painful relationship...
Yep. I dig the track. I’m with Mikalyn (and it may just be my country tendencies showing)- I’d like to know more of the story. Who’s prison? Why are you locked in? There are so many unanswered questions, that I’m spending too much time in my head, wondering if I missed something or trying to piece together the clues so I have some sense of context. It doesn’t have to be some big story. Could be a line or two that reveals the situation. Again, I dig the track, and I think it’s worth another look. Thanks for sharing it!
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April 07, 2017
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I'm locked up in your prison
For so long
I can't even remember
My one self
I feel like movin on tonight, I feel like movin on
I feel like breaking chains tonight, i feel like movin on
I feel like movin on tonight, I feel like movin on
I feel like breaking free tonight, i feel like movin on
And I feel
So alone
I only need
A way out of here, away out of here
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Cool metal track - and I loved the vibe. My only suggestion would be to expand the lyrics a bit so the listener gets some clue as to why you felt imprisoned and need to break free and move on. Still enjoyed the song though!!
March 31, 2017
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Yep. I dig the track. I’m with Mikalyn (and it may just be my country tendencies showing)- I’d like to know more of the story. Who’s prison? Why are you locked in? There are so many unanswered questions, that I’m spending too much time in my head, wondering if I missed something or trying to piece together the clues so I have some sense of context. It doesn’t have to be some big story. Could be a line or two that reveals the situation. Again, I dig the track, and I think it’s worth another look. Thanks for sharing it!
If you appreciate the feedback, please pay it forward by leaving a review on another writer’s song. Thanks!
April 07, 2017
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Mikalyn Hay
Cool metal track - and I loved the vibe. My only suggestion would be to expand the lyrics a bit so the listener gets some clue as to why you felt imprisoned and need to break free and move on. Still enjoyed the song though!!
March 31, 2017