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Ugly Is The New Beautiful

Jayne Sachs

March 20, 2017

Genre: Country

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Brent Baxter

Dang, Jayne!  This is COOL.  Love the title, love the vibe, love the thought behind it.  Fresh, catchy, cool imagery, sing-a-long.  This song is STRONG.  Loved it on the first listen.

Love the top of the 2nd verse, how you play off “knockout.”  Well done.  I’m personally not crazy about dropping s*** in verse two, but it could get changed to “stuff” and get on the radio.  “F’ed up” could be “messed up” for radio.  Easy edits, should an artist want to make them.  Might not hurt to have a “PG” version of the demo, just in case.

Only thing that really bumps for me is the 2nd line of the chorus.  Something about the back half of that line… the daddy stuff… bugs me.  I know you can beat it. Keep it in the moment, not “back then.”  Tell me what she is NOW, like the rest of the chorus does, not how she was THEN.  Maybe… tattooed arms and piercings… something something “shoes” or “boots?”  I don’t know, but I know you can do it, and I think it’ll make it a stronger song.

Overall, VERY cool.  I dig it a lot.  Great work.  I’d love to hear more!

March 20, 2017

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Amber Lewis

Wiw!

March 21, 2017

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Amber Lewis

Wow not wiw! Love the melody, lyrics, tempo, vocals!

March 21, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Thank you both Brent and Amber!  I appreciate it!
Brent, great feedback!  I know exactly what you mean about the daddy line.  Now that you mention it.  It does take the story “back” for a brief second.  Thanks so much for the feedback!!  So glad you like this.

We have been trying to get this song to Elle King but don’t know how to do that.
When we wrote it, we kept thinking of her look, personality, vocal.  Then after we wrote it, I googled Elle and saw a picture of her wearing a t-shirt that said “Ugliest”.
We took that as a sign!!

March 21, 2017

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Ronald Hill

story of my life! grin  You go girl!

March 24, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Thanks Ronald!  If that’s the story of your life… good life!!!

March 24, 2017

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Katie Fee

I love this! Really love the “uh oh oh"s as well as the addition of other voices on the first line of the chorus and the “hey"s.

March 24, 2017

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Ronnie Glenn

Great song Jayne! It’s still lingering in my ears. I think you have a lot of options with this song. I agree with Brent. I’m looking forward to hearing more from you.

March 25, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Thank you also to Katie and Ronnie!  SO glad you like the song!!

March 25, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Dang, Jayne!  This is COOL.  Love the title, love the vibe, love the thought behind it.  Fresh, catchy, cool imagery, sing-a-long.  This song is STRONG.  Loved it on the first listen.

Love the top of the 2nd verse, how you play off “knockout.”  Well done.  I’m personally not crazy about dropping s*** in verse two, but it could get changed to “stuff” and get on the radio.  “F’ed up” could be “messed up” for radio.  Easy edits, should an artist want to make them.  Might not hurt to have a “PG” version of the demo, just in case.

Only thing that really bumps for me is the 2nd line of the chorus.  Something about the back half of that line… the daddy stuff… bugs me.  I know you can beat it. Keep it in the moment, not “back then.”  Tell me what she is NOW, like the rest of the chorus does, not how she was THEN.  Maybe… tattooed arms and piercings… something something “shoes” or “boots?”  I don’t know, but I know you can do it, and I think it’ll make it a stronger song.

Overall, VERY cool.  I dig it a lot.  Great work.  I’d love to hear more!

March 20, 2017

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Amber Lewis

Wiw!

March 21, 2017

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Amber Lewis

Wow not wiw! Love the melody, lyrics, tempo, vocals!

March 21, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Thank you both Brent and Amber!  I appreciate it!
Brent, great feedback!  I know exactly what you mean about the daddy line.  Now that you mention it.  It does take the story “back” for a brief second.  Thanks so much for the feedback!!  So glad you like this.

We have been trying to get this song to Elle King but don’t know how to do that.
When we wrote it, we kept thinking of her look, personality, vocal.  Then after we wrote it, I googled Elle and saw a picture of her wearing a t-shirt that said “Ugliest”.
We took that as a sign!!

March 21, 2017

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Ronald Hill

story of my life! grin  You go girl!

March 24, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Thanks Ronald!  If that’s the story of your life… good life!!!

March 24, 2017

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Katie Fee

I love this! Really love the “uh oh oh"s as well as the addition of other voices on the first line of the chorus and the “hey"s.

March 24, 2017

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Ronnie Glenn

Great song Jayne! It’s still lingering in my ears. I think you have a lot of options with this song. I agree with Brent. I’m looking forward to hearing more from you.

March 25, 2017

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Jayne Sachs

Thank you also to Katie and Ronnie!  SO glad you like the song!!

March 25, 2017


Ugly Is The New Beautiful

Written by Jayne Sachs

Ugly Is The New Beautiful
Hattie Murdoch, Jayne Sachs

I’m a freak
I bet they think I’m a misfit
Cuz I don’t fit their picture
Don’t play the part
They can throw their darts
I ain’t perfect on the surface
Like some airbrushed, eff’d up, billboard beauty

Uh oh oh
What I am is what you get
Uh oh oh
A prototype they ain’t seen yet

I’m dollar store make-up bins, Salvation Army cardigans
Tattooed arms and piercings back when daddy had no clue
I’m brave as hell and I speak my mind
But if you need a penny, I’m a give a dime
And when I love, I love with all my soul
If that ain’t pretty, then ugly is the new beautiful

I throw a punch
If my back’s backed up into a corner
Ain’t never been no one’s knockout
They can do their worst
Can’t cover this girl with the shit their fakin’
The skin I’m in’s got a strong foundation

Uh oh oh
What they say can’t bring me down
Uh oh oh
There’s dynamite in this tinsel town

CH

If that mirror’s all we got
We’re not looking with our hearts
No it don’t take eyes to see
What’s beautiful down deep

Won’t let em put a bow on me
Cuz I ain’t selling what is free
If they’re gonna judge, let em judge all of me

I’m brave as hell and speak my mind
But if you need a penny, I’m a give a dime
And when I love, I love with all my soul

CH

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