March 16, 2017
A power ballad with a big build, describing a girl's desire to 'stay the night' on a first date even though it's against very nature to do so.
Hey, Ross! Thanks for sharing this song! Man, I wish you had posted the lyrics for us. Makes it hard for me to give specific feedback. However, based on a listen and your description of the song… I’d like to hear more tension in the melody and lyric. If she’s really torn between staying the night or following her “very nature,” I think she’d be having a tough time. I want to feel that tension in the melody and lyric. To me, that’s more interesting than someone who’s never done “that” before but just up and spends the night on the first date. Just my two cents. Hope it helps!
March 18, 2017
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March 18, 2017
Written by Ross Hemsworth
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