I almost couldn't finished this song and broke down crying after I completed it. It's about someone I used to love/still love that I lost to drug addiction, severe depression, and suicide. I haven't talked to anyone about it, and just buried the emotions until I wrote this song today, confronting this was emotionally exhausting, but I strangely do feel better after letting it all come to the surface, never realized how much I held in.
Hope you enjoy something I wrote from a deep place in my soul and heart stranger, enjoy.
Sorry, for your loss! awesome that you can reach out to others through music!
March 17, 2017
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Sorry for your loss. I only write lyrics right now but when I first started writing again I was in a bad place so a lot of my lyrics have the same emotion coming from them but in a way where it was me trying to fight my own demons out of it.
Would love to share with you sometime if you are interested.
-Amy
July 30, 2017
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Her eyes reflect on me
A whirlwind of addiction so deep
And she takes her daily dose that keeps her drowning in her sleep
She drifts like a breeze
Like she will float away
I watch from ashore I volunteer myself for misery
And I remember you from yesterday
I watched as you slowly blew away
I watch you as you just drift away
Her smile sinks into the sea
She's awake when she's asleep
Take a pill to feel yourself, to be someone else, to make you feel complete
She fades like a dream
Someday she'll blow away
The past drags you deeper than the ocean where no one can hear you scream
And I remember you from yesterday
I watched as you slowly blew away
I watch you as you just drift away
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Man, Alec… thanks for sharing that. I’ve also written about someone special that I’ve lost (a different kind of tragedy than you lost your person to). It was a HARD write, and I cried a lot.
Were the “you” and “her” shifts intentional? As if the addicted person before you now isn’t the same person (under the skin) than you remember from yesterday? If so, that’s really cool, and I’d like to see that thought brought out with more clarity. It’s a really strong sentiment, and I’d hate for the listener to just think you were careless with your pronouns.
Just a thought. Thanks again for sharing. I hope the writing process, though difficult, brought you some measure of peace.
March 15, 2017
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Sorry, for your loss! awesome that you can reach out to others through music!
March 17, 2017
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Sorry for your loss. I only write lyrics right now but when I first started writing again I was in a bad place so a lot of my lyrics have the same emotion coming from them but in a way where it was me trying to fight my own demons out of it.
Would love to share with you sometime if you are interested.
-Amy
July 30, 2017
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Man, Alec… thanks for sharing that. I’ve also written about someone special that I’ve lost (a different kind of tragedy than you lost your person to). It was a HARD write, and I cried a lot.
Were the “you” and “her” shifts intentional? As if the addicted person before you now isn’t the same person (under the skin) than you remember from yesterday? If so, that’s really cool, and I’d like to see that thought brought out with more clarity. It’s a really strong sentiment, and I’d hate for the listener to just think you were careless with your pronouns.
Just a thought. Thanks again for sharing. I hope the writing process, though difficult, brought you some measure of peace.
March 15, 2017
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