I love to travel and haven't been able to do so for a while so I wrote a song about it
Any feedback at all would be lovely.
I'm thinking of submitting this for 1 of the 2 songs in my songwriting portfolio for college. They don't expect people to have fully produced songs but I am wondering if this has a good enough quality to submit.
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VERSE
I wanna go somewhere
Somewhere far away
I wanna go somewhere
Don't get me wrong, I love this place
But I just can't stay
Put any longer
Cause I've got a hunger
To go somewhere
CHORUS
Somewhere
I've got a vagabond soul
I've just gotta go somewhere
I'm heading southbound
No turning back now
Cause life is so short
And the world is so wide
I've got to explore it all
Adventure awaits me
I can't let it escape me
No I just can't ignore the call
I wanna go somewhere
VERSE
I wanna find somewhere
Somewhere no one goes
I wanna find somewhere
Somewhere that's warm where I can soak in
The sunshine on my skin
No more winter blues
Cause today I choose
To find somewhere
REPEAT CHORUS
BRIDGE
Don't worry if you don't see me for a while
I promise I'll be back someday with a refreshed smile
But right now I've just gotta get out
Of this same old same old town
Gotta spread my wings and see what I can see
Yeah take a good look around
I wanna go somewhere
REPEAT CHORUS
OUTRO
I wanna go somewhere
I wanna go somewhere
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Hey, Katie!
Thanks for sharing your song! I like that you’re writing tempo and from the heart. I think you have an opportunity to make the song more memorable by adding in imagery. Show me where you are now. Show me some places you might go. You have a little bit of that in the 2nd verse, but (especially for country) you can REALLY ramp up the imagery.
Show me the dust-covered city limit sign. Show me the flat landscape, describe the sound of… nothing. Put me there. Then put me in the car on your way. Then put me on the beach or the mountains or a big city or a small town. Wherever.
Hope that helps! Thanks again for sharing!
March 15, 2017
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Brent Baxter
Hey, Katie!
Thanks for sharing your song! I like that you’re writing tempo and from the heart. I think you have an opportunity to make the song more memorable by adding in imagery. Show me where you are now. Show me some places you might go. You have a little bit of that in the 2nd verse, but (especially for country) you can REALLY ramp up the imagery.
Show me the dust-covered city limit sign. Show me the flat landscape, describe the sound of… nothing. Put me there. Then put me in the car on your way. Then put me on the beach or the mountains or a big city or a small town. Wherever.
Hope that helps! Thanks again for sharing!
March 15, 2017
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