About man's vanity and greed..
Thanks man..It’s not really supposed to be a ‘lesson’ and it is actually supposed to sound arrogant as the voice is actually ‘the man’ having a realization of his vanity in the chorus…i don’t know if u see my point..
February 12, 2017
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Thanks Cameron! You can check out the promotion vid as well as more songs on youtube!
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February 16, 2017
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I am immortal I'm called the man
I own the wind I own the sun
I own tomorrow
I fear no time I fear no death
I'll be forever you mark my words
I own tomorrow
All of my life I've been running in circles
All of my life I've been chasing the sun
I disappear and i revive
You think I'm gone but I'm alive
Go tell the story go spread the word
About the man who ruled the world
All of...
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Hey, Andreas! Cool title. I dig the feel, too. I like that you’re writing about vanity and greed. I clearly see his vain attitude. However, I’d kinda like to see some of the “lesson” in this song. I guess you’re doing that with the “running in circles” and “chasing the sun.” But it’s not as clear as I’d like it to be. If I’m not REALLY thinking about it, it just sounds like s really arrogant singer. There’s something cool there, not quite sure how to make the lesson clear wiki their getting cheesy or preachy, which I don’t think would work for this. Cool vibe, though, and good title.
February 11, 2017
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Thanks man..It’s not really supposed to be a ‘lesson’ and it is actually supposed to sound arrogant as the voice is actually ‘the man’ having a realization of his vanity in the chorus…i don’t know if u see my point..
February 12, 2017
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Thanks Cameron! You can check out the promotion vid as well as more songs on youtube!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kFFXb1H5-r8
February 16, 2017
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Hey, Andreas! Cool title. I dig the feel, too. I like that you’re writing about vanity and greed. I clearly see his vain attitude. However, I’d kinda like to see some of the “lesson” in this song. I guess you’re doing that with the “running in circles” and “chasing the sun.” But it’s not as clear as I’d like it to be. If I’m not REALLY thinking about it, it just sounds like s really arrogant singer. There’s something cool there, not quite sure how to make the lesson clear wiki their getting cheesy or preachy, which I don’t think would work for this. Cool vibe, though, and good title.
February 11, 2017
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