Turning an unpleasant situation into a good one..Achieving bliss and peace of mind..
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Hear the wind ring in your ears
Hold your life in your hands
It's the only thing you'll hear
It's the only thing you have
And hear the silence ring
In your guilty troubled mind
And have the time of your life
Tonight
Time is ticking on the clock
See your pieces on the floor
Time is ticking and you are dead
Thoughts are rushing through your head
And hear...
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Hi, Andreas! Thanks for sharing this song! Now, I’ll be honest, I love some rock, but it’s not my wheelhouse as a writer. So take my thoughts with a grain of salt…
I like the energy. I like that it moves. I feel like the energy and the feel outshines the lyric. I’m not sure what’s going on. It’s hard to connect with emotionally. But as far as a couple little technical things, be careful of using the word “hear” in the 1st and 3rd lines. You’re stealing some of the impact and thunder of your title “Hear The Silence.” I try not use (or overuse) any of the words that are in my title outside of the title if I can help it. It’s a little thing, but it helps your title to “pop” more. Or “rock” more, in this case.
But, like I said, I dig the overall vibe. Thanks for sharing!
February 08, 2017
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Hi, Andreas! Thanks for sharing this song! Now, I’ll be honest, I love some rock, but it’s not my wheelhouse as a writer. So take my thoughts with a grain of salt…
I like the energy. I like that it moves. I feel like the energy and the feel outshines the lyric. I’m not sure what’s going on. It’s hard to connect with emotionally. But as far as a couple little technical things, be careful of using the word “hear” in the 1st and 3rd lines. You’re stealing some of the impact and thunder of your title “Hear The Silence.” I try not use (or overuse) any of the words that are in my title outside of the title if I can help it. It’s a little thing, but it helps your title to “pop” more. Or “rock” more, in this case.
But, like I said, I dig the overall vibe. Thanks for sharing!
February 08, 2017