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You Leave Me Speechless

Ronnie Glenn

January 31, 2017

Genre: Country

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This is a work in progress. Singing is not one of my strengths but I am trying to write a song that connects with others.

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Ronnie! Thanks for sharing.  I like that it’s a love song sung “me-to-you” to the girl.  Your 1st verse has an opportunity to really put the listener into one of those moments where she leaves you speechless.  Don’t just say there’s been those moments- put the listener in one.  Paint the picture.  Then maybe in the 2nd verse, talk about how you want to say all these beautiful things to her, but sometimes, she’s just to stunning for those words to come out.  Hope that helps!

February 01, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

Painting a picture with words is one of the hardest things for a lyric writer to learn.  It’s like a different mindset, and I’m still learning myself.

I’ll share an example I learned while taking a short story writing course.  The instructor gave the following example, which I call the “John-John” rule.  If I say “John was mad”, you get how John felt, but if I say “John stomped out of the room and slammed the door behind him”, not only do you understand how John felt, but it also gives a mental image of how he felt, which is much more powerful.  While you don’t have the space for extra words in lyrics as you do in a story, always keep the John-John Rule in mind.

February 04, 2017

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Ronnie! Thanks for sharing.  I like that it’s a love song sung “me-to-you” to the girl.  Your 1st verse has an opportunity to really put the listener into one of those moments where she leaves you speechless.  Don’t just say there’s been those moments- put the listener in one.  Paint the picture.  Then maybe in the 2nd verse, talk about how you want to say all these beautiful things to her, but sometimes, she’s just to stunning for those words to come out.  Hope that helps!

February 01, 2017

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Phillip Lemmonds

Painting a picture with words is one of the hardest things for a lyric writer to learn.  It’s like a different mindset, and I’m still learning myself.

I’ll share an example I learned while taking a short story writing course.  The instructor gave the following example, which I call the “John-John” rule.  If I say “John was mad”, you get how John felt, but if I say “John stomped out of the room and slammed the door behind him”, not only do you understand how John felt, but it also gives a mental image of how he felt, which is much more powerful.  While you don’t have the space for extra words in lyrics as you do in a story, always keep the John-John Rule in mind.

February 04, 2017


You Leave Me Speechless

Written by Ronnie Glenn

There's been moments in my life
When you've taken my breath away
I'm living with the gift of your love
After all that we've been through
We can read between the signs
When those words aren't strong enough

It doesn't matter what we say that's for sure
We’re showing each other love and so much more

Chorus
You leave me speechless
I'm at a loss for words
it’s not a sign of weakness baby
It's amazingly heard
Listen, I must confess
That you leave me speechless

When you wrap your hand in mine
That soft touch melts my heart
Right here with you is where I belong
Knowing one another's ups and downs
We know it's not always easy
But somehow our love stays strong

So girl, let’s forget about the world tonight
You know what I’m talking about, yeah that’s right

Chorus

Baby I'm really glad you asked
You're my first love too and my last

Chorus

© 2016 Ronnie Glenn

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