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Sat down with Maddy Rodriquez and Johnny Simmens and we wrote this on a fall afternoon. The lyrics are pretty self explantory 
Any feedback is fine
Sweet hook and concept. The lyrics are great for the purpose/audience. The vocal is beautiful. The melody is great. I’d say the verses are “safe” or even sounds like an international song, a song made for a younger audience, or not as driven around 20 something American pop. I guess I’m begging for more controversy in the verse’s lyrics. More risk that makes me feel something before I get to that hook. The production is light enough that there’s room for more edge in your words… I want to hear V2
February 24, 2017
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Verse 1
Why is it your always on my mind
I told myself you were a waste of time
Boy, I only wanted to be friends
told you it was never ever going to happen
Chorus
Your so sneaky
How'd you get me dialing your number
How'd you get me to ask you over
How'd you get me thinking about you
How'd you do it
Baby, its like you always new this would happen
You were doing the right things to me
You got me in the palm of your hand
Your so sneaky
Verse 2
I see you watching me not gonna lie
I like the way that your looking in my eyes
This could'nt have been a coincidence
You touch my hand suddenly I am leaning in
Pre Chorus
How come
you keep
Distracting me
Got me caught and Im
trying to break free
Bridge
What did you do
I think I am falling for you now
Im done, Im doomed
Its like some kind of voodoo.
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Mikalyn, that’s just goooood. I like it a lot. Not much to pick at, other than a few little things:
In verse 2, there’s too much emphasis on the word “a” in the phrase “a coincidence.” Sounds unnatural and “bumped” for me. Watch out for that kind of stuff in the future.
I’d also prefer some sort of imagery in verse 1. Glad you’ve painted some in the chorus and verse 2, though.
Overall, I like the feel, the title, and a lot of your phrasing. Good work!
January 26, 2017
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Sweet hook and concept. The lyrics are great for the purpose/audience. The vocal is beautiful. The melody is great. I’d say the verses are “safe” or even sounds like an international song, a song made for a younger audience, or not as driven around 20 something American pop. I guess I’m begging for more controversy in the verse’s lyrics. More risk that makes me feel something before I get to that hook. The production is light enough that there’s room for more edge in your words… I want to hear V2
February 24, 2017
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Mikalyn, that’s just goooood. I like it a lot. Not much to pick at, other than a few little things:
In verse 2, there’s too much emphasis on the word “a” in the phrase “a coincidence.” Sounds unnatural and “bumped” for me. Watch out for that kind of stuff in the future.
I’d also prefer some sort of imagery in verse 1. Glad you’ve painted some in the chorus and verse 2, though.
Overall, I like the feel, the title, and a lot of your phrasing. Good work!
January 26, 2017