A song I wrote with Rick Leather and BJ Peace. Produced by Stacy Hogan, Nashville. Vocals by Mike Lusk.
Any and all feedback, including criticism, is welcome.
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The Other Side of Lonely
By David Sanchez, Rick Leather & Bobby Joe Peace
Verse:
Girl, it’s good to see you after all this time
Guess my loss was California's gain
Sure hope the west coast is treatin’ you alright
Me, I guess I've been ok
But I know I'll see better days
Chorus:
Somewhere on the other side of lonely
When I can finally make it through
One night when I don't ache for you
I’ll find someplace where your memory don't own me
Somewhere on the other side of lonely
Verse:
Girl, I’m not holdin’ things against you now
Sometimes you gotta chase your dreams alone
And I’ll get past prayin’ that you’ll be back somehow
Once this single thread of hope
Turns me loose and lets me go
Repeat Chorus
Bridge:
I've never walked a road
So long 'n dark and cold
Tryin’ to get you off my mind
Has been an endless, uphill climb
Repeat Chorus
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Hey, David! Thanks for sharing. It’s a solid song. I really like the “make it through / ache for you” rhyme. Nice production, good vocal, story makes sense. You’re checking off a lot of the boxes.
Nothing I can point to as “wrong.” My concern, though, is if you’re aiming this for a current country cut. For today’s market, this feels dated- production, lyrical sensibility, etc.
Maybe you wrote this a while back. Maybe you aren’t aiming for a current cut. But if you are, that’s a concern. Doesn’t make it a bad song. It’s definitely NOT a bad song. It’s good. But it’s just not (to my ears) on top of the commercial market.
Hope that makes sense. Hope it’s helpful.
January 26, 2017
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Brent Baxter
Hey, David! Thanks for sharing. It’s a solid song. I really like the “make it through / ache for you” rhyme. Nice production, good vocal, story makes sense. You’re checking off a lot of the boxes.
Nothing I can point to as “wrong.” My concern, though, is if you’re aiming this for a current country cut. For today’s market, this feels dated- production, lyrical sensibility, etc.
Maybe you wrote this a while back. Maybe you aren’t aiming for a current cut. But if you are, that’s a concern. Doesn’t make it a bad song. It’s definitely NOT a bad song. It’s good. But it’s just not (to my ears) on top of the commercial market.
Hope that makes sense. Hope it’s helpful.
January 26, 2017
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