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Moving On With My Life

Ronnie Glenn

December 23, 2016

Genre: Country

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I wrote this song some time ago when I was trying to tackle a heartache at one point in my life. I am not a singer. Right now it sounds pitiful in my ears.

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Lyrics, do they make sense?


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Phillip Lemmonds

It would be easier to analyze the lyrics if you added them to your posting.  On first listen, they sound heartfelt and emotional.  Sounded like the song structure was okay.

I believe Frettie is supposed to be used by songwriters to post material and get feedback from other songwriters, so as long as you have one instrument to get an idea of the music, and a vocal that is understandable with the melody, don’t worry about your singing ability.  If a song is GREAT, it will shine no matter the wrapper it comes in.

December 23, 2016

Ronnie Glenn

Thanks for stopping by Phillip and giving this tune of mine a listen. I added the lyrics for you and anyone else that wants to check out the words. Uploading and posting songs is difficult for me sometimes.

Especially those songs I perform on my own like this one.  This is a simple guitar/vocal worktape to see if I’m moving the song in the right direction or not with ears other than my own.

Thanks again, Merry Christmas

 

December 23, 2016

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Phillip Lemmonds

I think you have the bones of the song there, but the lyrics need some work.  There was nothing that really stood out for me lyrically… nothing memorable about them.

The first thing is to avoid overused phrases, like “fool in love”, “sooner or later”, and “time will tell”.  Come up with a fresh way to say the same thing that we haven’t heard before.

December 31, 2016

Brent Baxter

Hi, Ronnie!
First of all, the audio / production quality of the song is plenty good enough for posting in Frettie. If your purpose in posting is to get feedback and make your song better, there’s no need to spend a bunch of money before it’s “done.”

As for this song, one big thing I’d look at is adding fresh, compelling imagery to the song. You’ve told me how you feel, but it’s more powerful to SHOW me what those feelings look, sound, taste, feel & smell like. That’ll help your lyric be more memorable.

Thanks for posting!

January 04, 2017


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Phillip Lemmonds

It would be easier to analyze the lyrics if you added them to your posting.  On first listen, they sound heartfelt and emotional.  Sounded like the song structure was okay.

I believe Frettie is supposed to be used by songwriters to post material and get feedback from other songwriters, so as long as you have one instrument to get an idea of the music, and a vocal that is understandable with the melody, don’t worry about your singing ability.  If a song is GREAT, it will shine no matter the wrapper it comes in.

December 23, 2016

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Ronnie Glenn

Thanks for stopping by Phillip and giving this tune of mine a listen. I added the lyrics for you and anyone else that wants to check out the words. Uploading and posting songs is difficult for me sometimes.

Especially those songs I perform on my own like this one.  This is a simple guitar/vocal worktape to see if I’m moving the song in the right direction or not with ears other than my own.

Thanks again, Merry Christmas

 

December 23, 2016

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Phillip Lemmonds

I think you have the bones of the song there, but the lyrics need some work.  There was nothing that really stood out for me lyrically… nothing memorable about them.

The first thing is to avoid overused phrases, like “fool in love”, “sooner or later”, and “time will tell”.  Come up with a fresh way to say the same thing that we haven’t heard before.

December 31, 2016

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Brent Baxter

Hi, Ronnie!
First of all, the audio / production quality of the song is plenty good enough for posting in Frettie. If your purpose in posting is to get feedback and make your song better, there’s no need to spend a bunch of money before it’s “done.”

As for this song, one big thing I’d look at is adding fresh, compelling imagery to the song. You’ve told me how you feel, but it’s more powerful to SHOW me what those feelings look, sound, taste, feel & smell like. That’ll help your lyric be more memorable.

Thanks for posting!

January 04, 2017


Moving On With My Life

Written by Ronnie Glenn

Moving on with my life
( Ronnie Glenn )

She was the worst thing that ever happened to me
Wish I would of known it at the time
Yeah I thought I loved her but my heart won’t forget
How long it took for the pain to subside

CHORUS
Now I can breathe, I’m single and free
But this stuff in between
Is gonna take some time
Everyday it’s getting easier
And for all that it’s worth
I’m moving on with my life

I can’t deny it, thought it was the real thing
Looking back I was a fool in love
There was a bitter end now it makes perfect sense
What we had wasn’t strong enough

CHORUS

The hardest part of letting go
Are the memories that leave a trace
Sooner or later, time will tell
What we’ve learned along the way

CHORUS

For all that it’s worth
I’m moving on with my life

© Ronnie Glenn

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