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Safe

Jayne Sachs

December 04, 2016

Genre: Country

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Brent Baxter

Hey, Jayne!
Thanks for sharing!  I dig that it’s got some groove.  I love how you said he’s not gonna be the red in her eyes or the toss in her turns.  That’s a great way of showing instead of just telling.  Good stuff!  Oh, and it was a nice, unexpected twist on the word “safe.”  I thought you were just gonna say she was “safe.”  I like that you went to that next level with it.

Positive, love, mid tempo groove, me-to-you singing, nice imagery…

Good writing!  Good job!

December 22, 2016

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Jayne Sachs

Thanks so much Brent.  Really appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment. That means a lot!
Thank you!!

Jayne

December 22, 2016


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Brent Baxter

Hey, Jayne!
Thanks for sharing!  I dig that it’s got some groove.  I love how you said he’s not gonna be the red in her eyes or the toss in her turns.  That’s a great way of showing instead of just telling.  Good stuff!  Oh, and it was a nice, unexpected twist on the word “safe.”  I thought you were just gonna say she was “safe.”  I like that you went to that next level with it.

Positive, love, mid tempo groove, me-to-you singing, nice imagery…

Good writing!  Good job!

December 22, 2016

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Jayne Sachs

Thanks so much Brent.  Really appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment. That means a lot!
Thank you!!

Jayne

December 22, 2016


Safe
Michael August, Jayne Sachs

Girl I know you're scared, your heart's been hurt before                        
But look at me I swear I won't take a risk with yours                          
I'm not gonna be the red in your eyes
The toss of your turns the wake ups in your night
No baby I

CH
I wanna be the fall that you ain't gotta brace for             
The home plate that you always gonna race toward
The spark in the dark when you get lost baby
I wanna be the kiss that god made your lips for
The kinda high that you don't need a net for
Cuz I'll guard your heart, so you ain't gotta lock it away
I'll be your safe 
You’re sa aa afe
Baby your safe
You’re sa aa afe


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We can talk all night, you can tell me everything                                            
Everything you hide, ya don't gotta hide from me
I’d love to be the shine in your eyes
the curve of your smile, the laugh until we cry

CH

Girl I know you're scared, your heart's been hurt before                        
But look at me I swear I’ain’t taking a risk with yours

CH

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