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Old Souls

Jayne Sachs

November 20, 2016

Genre: Country

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We feel this could cross from/to country/pop
Thanks for listening!


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Phillip Lemmonds

Good sound and intimate lyrics, but maybe too depressing for commercial appeal.

December 18, 2016

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Jayne Sachs

Thank you for the feedback Phillip.  Interesting about it being depressing.  I don’t really hear it that way.  It’s deep… yes.

December 18, 2016

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Phillip Lemmonds

Okay, maybe depressing is too strong a word.  But here’s what I hear… you’re alone, you’re okay with being alone, you’re crying, and your man isn’t where he’s supposed to be.

As for being deep, my takeaway is you’re not emotionally attached to this guy and just with him until you find the one that deserves you.  But, is a casual listener going to get any deep meaning in a 4 minute song?

Don’t get me wrong, I think the song is beautiful, but might have a limited audience.

BTW, nice reference of “neon” in the bridge back to “lights on Broadway” in the first verse!

December 31, 2016

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Jayne Sachs

Well it’s just a song… the song that was “in the room” that day.  We think it has commercial appeal, but it is what it is!  But I definitely think a song can be deep in even a 3 minute song. I definitely do. “I Drive Your Truck” for example. Thanks for your thoughts.  Happy New Year.  Happy writing.

December 31, 2016

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Phillip Lemmonds

Good sound and intimate lyrics, but maybe too depressing for commercial appeal.

December 18, 2016

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Jayne Sachs

Thank you for the feedback Phillip.  Interesting about it being depressing.  I don’t really hear it that way.  It’s deep… yes.

December 18, 2016

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Phillip Lemmonds

Okay, maybe depressing is too strong a word.  But here’s what I hear… you’re alone, you’re okay with being alone, you’re crying, and your man isn’t where he’s supposed to be.

As for being deep, my takeaway is you’re not emotionally attached to this guy and just with him until you find the one that deserves you.  But, is a casual listener going to get any deep meaning in a 4 minute song?

Don’t get me wrong, I think the song is beautiful, but might have a limited audience.

BTW, nice reference of “neon” in the bridge back to “lights on Broadway” in the first verse!

December 31, 2016

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Jayne Sachs

Well it’s just a song… the song that was “in the room” that day.  We think it has commercial appeal, but it is what it is!  But I definitely think a song can be deep in even a 3 minute song. I definitely do. “I Drive Your Truck” for example. Thanks for your thoughts.  Happy New Year.  Happy writing.

December 31, 2016


Old Souls
Michelle Pereira, Jayne Sachs

I’m not like most girls my age
I don’t need the lights on Broadway to fix a heartbreak
I can drink my thoughts take em down deep
All by myself until I find the one who deserves me

And if that’s wise beyond my years
Then it must be wisdom in these tears

CH
I guess old souls love a midnight rain
And watching the night fade away
I guess old souls can stare at a dying flame
And be okay if it never burns again
I guess old souls… we learn to be alone

When the sun lays down, and the dark creeps in
And there’s no call, I know where he is again
Yeah we all make our choices in life
We make our beds, so we gotta sleep in them at night

If tears fall like hopes and dreams
I’ll let em fall where they’re meant to be

CH

Young hearts may fall easy
Give their love cuz trust is free
Underneath neon stars don’t they all got it made

CH

We learn to be alone

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