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This is the the 8th song that I've written as part of a 100 day songwriting challenge - where I have to write a new song every day for 100 days.
It's all about seizing the moment and blocking out all of the stuff that gets in the way - Negative thoughts, existentialism, trivial worries.
Any feedback on all aspects of the song are appreciated
I think you have an awesome voice for this style of music and I think that if you listened to Brent and tweaked the lyric or just how you sang it it would be great. But a lot of folk writers write that way where they break up thoughts.j just my 2cents but I’m no pro ...just a fan.
August 01, 2017
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There is no silence
There is no death
There is no ending
Sometimes there is rest
There is no future
Forget the past
Live in the moment
And try to make it last
If it doesn't work
You should try a little harder
Block out the noise
It's purpose to distract
You from seeing when the now is gone
You never get it back
There is no daytime
There is no night
There's only how you spend
Your time while you're alive
And there are people
Some will tie you down
Others hold the key
The reason you're around
But you've gotta work
Focus on the others
Block out the noise
It's purpose to distract
You from seeing when the now is gone
You never get it back
Time is fleeting
While I sing this song
Youth is for the young
To find where they belong
I have chosen
How to spend my time
To sing and play guitar
Tomorrow I could die
I've gotta work
And try my very hardest
Block out the noise
It's purpose to distract
Me from seeing when the now is gone
I'll never get it back
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I dig the title! Watch out for breaking up a complete sentence or thought into two lines like you do with “It’s purpose to distract…...... you from seeing when the now is gone.” The first time it threw me. I felt a “period” end of the sentence after “distract.” Then when you come back in with “you,” I think it’s the start of a new sentence or thought, and I get confused. Thankfully, I had the lyric in front of me. However, most listeners won’t have that luxury. Anyway, I hope that helps. Thanks for sharing!
December 28, 2016
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I think you have an awesome voice for this style of music and I think that if you listened to Brent and tweaked the lyric or just how you sang it it would be great. But a lot of folk writers write that way where they break up thoughts.j just my 2cents but I’m no pro ...just a fan.
August 01, 2017
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I dig the title! Watch out for breaking up a complete sentence or thought into two lines like you do with “It’s purpose to distract…...... you from seeing when the now is gone.” The first time it threw me. I felt a “period” end of the sentence after “distract.” Then when you come back in with “you,” I think it’s the start of a new sentence or thought, and I get confused. Thankfully, I had the lyric in front of me. However, most listeners won’t have that luxury. Anyway, I hope that helps. Thanks for sharing!
December 28, 2016
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