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One of my co-writers, Sierra, was talking about being frustrated w/ guys whose idea of romance is sitting at a bar, when she said, "Don't buy me a drink; ask me to dance!" So I started playing a mid-tempo waltz and we worked up the melody and lyrics.
Any and all is appreciated! Thanks for listening!
Hey Phillip!
Thanks so much for your comments!
I tell you what—that third verse was bothering me. I knew something was wrong but for some reason couldn’t articulate it to my co-writers. Thanks so much for putting your finger on it!
As far “spin me ‘round the room / moving slow” goes… another good point. May be worth a lyrical change there, too.
Really appreciate the feedback!
January 26, 2016
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I really love the first and second verses and I also agree with Phillip and Mary on the chorus and third verse.
You might word it like
“I couldn’t believe when you held out your hand,
didn’t buy me a drink but asked me to dance.”
This is a cool song!
July 12, 2016
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Don't Buy Me a Drink
© G. Irwin, S. Molinda, K. Pappas
Don't want whiskey, tequila or cheap pickup lines
Thanks for the offer, I'm doing just fine
If you're looking at me like you want a chance
Don't buy me a drink, ask me to dance
The buzz that I want don't come from the bar
It's out on the floor in a gentleman’s arms
Who makes me believe in love and romance
Don't buy me a drink, ask me to dance
Pull me close
Don't let go
Spin me ‘round the room
Movin’ slow
I paid for my beer, was on my way out
When the band said "Hey y'all, let's slow it down"
I couldn't believe when he held out his hand
He didn't buy me a drink, he asked me to dance
Pull me close
Don't let go
Spin me ‘round the room
Movin’ slow
Just in time
Your heartbeat next to mine
Take me ‘round again
I don't mind
Don't want whiskey, tequila or cheap pickup lines
Thanks for the offer, I'm doing just fine
If you're looking at me like you want a chance
Don't buy me a drink, ask me to dance
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George, I’m a nobody from nowhere who’s new at songwriting, but here are a couple of observations…
In the chorus, how can I spin you around the room slowly? I think of spinning around the room as moving pretty fast.
Second, after the first chorus, you changed from first person to third person (he instead of you).
Other than that, good job!
January 23, 2016
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Hey Phillip!
Thanks so much for your comments!
I tell you what—that third verse was bothering me. I knew something was wrong but for some reason couldn’t articulate it to my co-writers. Thanks so much for putting your finger on it!
As far “spin me ‘round the room / moving slow” goes… another good point. May be worth a lyrical change there, too.
Really appreciate the feedback!
January 26, 2016
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Phillip Lemmonds
George, I’m a nobody from nowhere who’s new at songwriting, but here are a couple of observations…
In the chorus, how can I spin you around the room slowly? I think of spinning around the room as moving pretty fast.
Second, after the first chorus, you changed from first person to third person (he instead of you).
Other than that, good job!
January 23, 2016
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