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March 03, 2018

Richard Kirk gave feedback on Skipping Stones

hi, overall I like the concept. good action words and descriptions. In v. 1 the rhyming of away with way bothers me some.too similar. In CH the first two lines are a little confusing to me, I know what your’e saying just a little awkward. Second v does exactly... Read More

January 12, 2018

Richard Kirk gave feedback on Fall on Me

well, I’m not that familiar with Christian rock, but I could see how this could fit there. On the other hand, if that’s where you want this to go, I think it should be more obvious-which I realize would maybe take away the secular. It’s a trade... Read More

November 17, 2017

Richard Kirk gave feedback on Treading Water

Hey, loved the title and overall concept. Like Brent I want to hear The title more, especially as the payoff at the end of the chorus.  Guess some others have said that. Some good internal rhymes, though one has to be careful not to overdo them.  Good production,... Read More

October 29, 2017

Richard Kirk gave feedback on ON THE OTHER SIDE

Love the sentiment, well said in general. Melody works fine.  In the second verse, I think you used “side” which is in the title. I personally try to avoid that.  In fact, it might be a good idea to vary that rhyme scheme to another sound besides the... Read More

August 04, 2017

Richard Kirk gave feedback on Sunday Supper

really liked this one. visuals are good. The Andy G is a little bit of a stretch for some, and I don’t care for how it conflicts with MayberREE- no one says the accent on the last syllable. If you could redo that this would be great. But I... Read More